芬芳襲人花枝俏，喜氣盈門捷報(bào)到。心花怒放看通知，夢(mèng)想實(shí)現(xiàn)今日事，喜笑顏開憶往昔，勤學(xué)苦讀美麗。在學(xué)習(xí)中學(xué)會(huì)復(fù)習(xí)，在運(yùn)用中培養(yǎng)能力，在總結(jié)中不斷提高。以下是為大家整理的《六年級(jí)英語(yǔ)作文及點(diǎn)評(píng)【五篇】》 供您查閱。
【第一篇：Winter】
Winter
Although winter means cold weather, I love it all the same. I think winter is a beautiful season, especially when it snows. Snowflakes fall down naughtily. They fall on branches of trees, on roofs of houses and on wheat fields. Soon the whole earth will be dressed in white. Everything is shining in the sun. Every time it snows, I will remember an old saying, "Winter has come, can spring be far away?"
【譯文】
冬天
雖然冬天意味著寒冷，但我仍然熱愛冬天。我認(rèn)為冬天是一個(gè)美麗的季節(jié)，尤其是下雪的日子。雪花像玲瓏剔透的小精靈，調(diào)皮地飄落下來。它們落在樹枝上，屋頂上和麥田里。很快整個(gè)大地都銀妝素裹起來。太陽(yáng)出來后，萬(wàn)物都閃爍著光芒。每次下雪，我都會(huì)記起一句格言：“冬天來了，春天還會(huì)遠(yuǎn)嗎?”
教師點(diǎn)評(píng)：短文內(nèi)容細(xì)膩而不乏活潑，能將樸實(shí)的英語(yǔ)語(yǔ)言翻譯的如此美麗漢語(yǔ)，可見你是個(gè)喜歡學(xué)習(xí)的人，希望繼續(xù)努力。
【第二篇：Li Ying ’S Hobby】
Li Ying ’S Hobby
Li Ying likes English very much. She works hard at it. She reads English every morning. She likes speaking English. She often listens to the radio. She watches TV only on Saturday evening.
Does she like dancing? No, she doesn’t. But she likes drawing and singing. Her parents love her. And all the teachers and her friends like her, too. She says her hobbies make her happy.
【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】
這一篇寫愛好的文章,小作者的寫作思路很值得我們學(xué)習(xí),他沒有具體寫到劉瑩的某一種愛好,而是從學(xué)習(xí)到課余的多種愛好入手,對(duì)劉瑩的各種愛好進(jìn)行了粗線條地勾畫.從“愛好”這個(gè)角度來看劉瑩的話，我們會(huì)覺得這個(gè)形象很飽滿。
小朋友們寫這種“敘事寫人”作文時(shí)，可以從兩個(gè)角度下手：一是具體地描繪;二是和上面小朋友一樣，粗線條地勾畫，二者各有所長(zhǎng)，另處在行文中使用一些問句，使用一些轉(zhuǎn)述的話，可以使作文更有靈氣，避免了平鋪直敘的缺點(diǎn)。比如上文的“Does she like dancing? No, she doesn’t.”和“she says her hobbies make her happy.”就是十分不錯(cuò)的句子，使讀者眼前為之一亮。
【第三篇：Don’t be against the traffic】
Don’t be against the traffic rules
I go to school from Monday to Friday .I go to school by bike at 7:30 in the morning .I must cross two busy roads .If the traffic light is red or yellow,I know I can’t cross the road ,so I wait.
If the light turns green, I know it means “Go”, and then I walk across the road .I always ride on the right side of the road .I am never against the traffic rules.
【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】
這篇作文的題目是“不要違反交通規(guī)則”，小作者沒有說一些空話，而是從自己的經(jīng)歷寫起，敘述自己以什么方式去上學(xué)，在上學(xué)的路上是怎么做的，很形象。
小朋友們?cè)谧魑臅r(shí)注意不要圖大，那樣很容易使文章顯得空洞，而要寫自己身邊熟悉的事情。要注意行文中字母的大小寫、句子的標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)等。
【第四篇：I Love My Family】
I Love My Family
Here is a photo lf my family. These are four people in my family. They are my father, my mother, my brother and I.
My father is a doctor. He works in a hospital far away. He goes to work by subway. My mother is a teacher. She works in a school near my home. She goes to work by bike. After work, they like reading books. Who is the tall boy? He is my brother. He is five years older than me. He is a singer. He’s now in Beijing. He goes there by plane. I love my family.
【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】
一個(gè)平凡的題材，一篇生動(dòng)的作文。這樣的命題，我們可能面對(duì)幾次，甚至幾十次了。但這位小朋友的筆端很是靈巧，了了數(shù)言，讓一個(gè)幸福的家庭躍然紙上，很值得我們?nèi)ニ伎?，我們能做到?
小朋友的這篇作文除了語(yǔ)言優(yōu)美之外，在結(jié)構(gòu)上也有閃光之處。先總說，將自己的家人逐個(gè)介紹一遍，后分說，把家人的工作、上班方式，愛好一一細(xì)說。后以一句話進(jìn)行概括，起到點(diǎn)題的作用。我們?cè)趯戭愃频淖魑牡臅r(shí)候是不是也可以借鑒呢?
【第五篇：How to get to the science museum】
How to get to the science museum
We are going to the science museum tomorrow. There is an old thing show in the Museum. Do you know how we can get to the science museum?
The science museum is next to the People’s Park. It’s isn’t far from our school. So we can go there on foot .Walk straight to the west from our school, next turn left at the post office and walk for about 5 minutes, then turn right at traffic lights. You can find the People’s Park on the right . Walk straight, and you’ll see the science museum.
【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】
這篇作文的題目是“怎樣去科學(xué)博物館”。怎樣才算是一篇好作文呢?通過你的敘述，能讓別人很容易找到博物館，這應(yīng)是基本的要求。小作者在文中告訴我們什么呢?首先他寫了去博物館的位置，后濃墨重彩，指明從學(xué)校去博物館的具體路線，這條路線夠清晰吧!
小朋友們?cè)趯戇@類作文的時(shí)候，總有些無從下手的感覺，不知從何說起。其實(shí)介紹路線，無非就是告訴他人某段路的起點(diǎn)和終點(diǎn)，還有就是如何從起點(diǎn)走到終點(diǎn)。要給他人說清楚，你自己首先得清楚，然后再通過自己的敘述，將路線清清楚楚得呈現(xiàn)出來。一定要注意行文中一些關(guān)鍵的地方，如在哪兒轉(zhuǎn)彎，向哪兒轉(zhuǎn)，經(jīng)過哪些重要的交通標(biāo)志或顯眼的標(biāo)志建筑等。這樣，你就能說清，別人也能弄明白。
【第一篇：Winter】
Winter
Although winter means cold weather, I love it all the same. I think winter is a beautiful season, especially when it snows. Snowflakes fall down naughtily. They fall on branches of trees, on roofs of houses and on wheat fields. Soon the whole earth will be dressed in white. Everything is shining in the sun. Every time it snows, I will remember an old saying, "Winter has come, can spring be far away?"
【譯文】
冬天
雖然冬天意味著寒冷，但我仍然熱愛冬天。我認(rèn)為冬天是一個(gè)美麗的季節(jié)，尤其是下雪的日子。雪花像玲瓏剔透的小精靈，調(diào)皮地飄落下來。它們落在樹枝上，屋頂上和麥田里。很快整個(gè)大地都銀妝素裹起來。太陽(yáng)出來后，萬(wàn)物都閃爍著光芒。每次下雪，我都會(huì)記起一句格言：“冬天來了，春天還會(huì)遠(yuǎn)嗎?”
教師點(diǎn)評(píng)：短文內(nèi)容細(xì)膩而不乏活潑，能將樸實(shí)的英語(yǔ)語(yǔ)言翻譯的如此美麗漢語(yǔ)，可見你是個(gè)喜歡學(xué)習(xí)的人，希望繼續(xù)努力。
【第二篇：Li Ying ’S Hobby】
Li Ying ’S Hobby
Li Ying likes English very much. She works hard at it. She reads English every morning. She likes speaking English. She often listens to the radio. She watches TV only on Saturday evening.
Does she like dancing? No, she doesn’t. But she likes drawing and singing. Her parents love her. And all the teachers and her friends like her, too. She says her hobbies make her happy.
【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】
這一篇寫愛好的文章,小作者的寫作思路很值得我們學(xué)習(xí),他沒有具體寫到劉瑩的某一種愛好,而是從學(xué)習(xí)到課余的多種愛好入手,對(duì)劉瑩的各種愛好進(jìn)行了粗線條地勾畫.從“愛好”這個(gè)角度來看劉瑩的話，我們會(huì)覺得這個(gè)形象很飽滿。
小朋友們寫這種“敘事寫人”作文時(shí)，可以從兩個(gè)角度下手：一是具體地描繪;二是和上面小朋友一樣，粗線條地勾畫，二者各有所長(zhǎng)，另處在行文中使用一些問句，使用一些轉(zhuǎn)述的話，可以使作文更有靈氣，避免了平鋪直敘的缺點(diǎn)。比如上文的“Does she like dancing? No, she doesn’t.”和“she says her hobbies make her happy.”就是十分不錯(cuò)的句子，使讀者眼前為之一亮。
【第三篇：Don’t be against the traffic】
Don’t be against the traffic rules
I go to school from Monday to Friday .I go to school by bike at 7:30 in the morning .I must cross two busy roads .If the traffic light is red or yellow,I know I can’t cross the road ,so I wait.
If the light turns green, I know it means “Go”, and then I walk across the road .I always ride on the right side of the road .I am never against the traffic rules.
【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】
這篇作文的題目是“不要違反交通規(guī)則”，小作者沒有說一些空話，而是從自己的經(jīng)歷寫起，敘述自己以什么方式去上學(xué)，在上學(xué)的路上是怎么做的，很形象。
小朋友們?cè)谧魑臅r(shí)注意不要圖大，那樣很容易使文章顯得空洞，而要寫自己身邊熟悉的事情。要注意行文中字母的大小寫、句子的標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)等。
【第四篇：I Love My Family】
I Love My Family
Here is a photo lf my family. These are four people in my family. They are my father, my mother, my brother and I.
My father is a doctor. He works in a hospital far away. He goes to work by subway. My mother is a teacher. She works in a school near my home. She goes to work by bike. After work, they like reading books. Who is the tall boy? He is my brother. He is five years older than me. He is a singer. He’s now in Beijing. He goes there by plane. I love my family.
【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】
一個(gè)平凡的題材，一篇生動(dòng)的作文。這樣的命題，我們可能面對(duì)幾次，甚至幾十次了。但這位小朋友的筆端很是靈巧，了了數(shù)言，讓一個(gè)幸福的家庭躍然紙上，很值得我們?nèi)ニ伎?，我們能做到?
小朋友的這篇作文除了語(yǔ)言優(yōu)美之外，在結(jié)構(gòu)上也有閃光之處。先總說，將自己的家人逐個(gè)介紹一遍，后分說，把家人的工作、上班方式，愛好一一細(xì)說。后以一句話進(jìn)行概括，起到點(diǎn)題的作用。我們?cè)趯戭愃频淖魑牡臅r(shí)候是不是也可以借鑒呢?
【第五篇：How to get to the science museum】
How to get to the science museum
We are going to the science museum tomorrow. There is an old thing show in the Museum. Do you know how we can get to the science museum?
The science museum is next to the People’s Park. It’s isn’t far from our school. So we can go there on foot .Walk straight to the west from our school, next turn left at the post office and walk for about 5 minutes, then turn right at traffic lights. You can find the People’s Park on the right . Walk straight, and you’ll see the science museum.
【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】
這篇作文的題目是“怎樣去科學(xué)博物館”。怎樣才算是一篇好作文呢?通過你的敘述，能讓別人很容易找到博物館，這應(yīng)是基本的要求。小作者在文中告訴我們什么呢?首先他寫了去博物館的位置，后濃墨重彩，指明從學(xué)校去博物館的具體路線，這條路線夠清晰吧!
小朋友們?cè)趯戇@類作文的時(shí)候，總有些無從下手的感覺，不知從何說起。其實(shí)介紹路線，無非就是告訴他人某段路的起點(diǎn)和終點(diǎn)，還有就是如何從起點(diǎn)走到終點(diǎn)。要給他人說清楚，你自己首先得清楚，然后再通過自己的敘述，將路線清清楚楚得呈現(xiàn)出來。一定要注意行文中一些關(guān)鍵的地方，如在哪兒轉(zhuǎn)彎，向哪兒轉(zhuǎn)，經(jīng)過哪些重要的交通標(biāo)志或顯眼的標(biāo)志建筑等。這樣，你就能說清，別人也能弄明白。