高三英語作文:某周報(bào)創(chuàng)刊五周年之際征集讀者意見

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假定你是李華,你所喜愛的Global Mirror周報(bào)創(chuàng)刊五周年之際征集讀者意見。請你依據(jù)以下內(nèi)容給主編寫封信,內(nèi)容主要包括:
    1. 說明你是該報(bào)的忠實(shí)讀者
    2. 贊賞該報(bào)優(yōu)點(diǎn):
    1) 兼顧國內(nèi)外新聞
    2) 介紹名人成功故事
    3. 提出建議:刊登指導(dǎo)英語學(xué)習(xí)的文章
    注意:
    1. 詞數(shù)100左右,開頭語已為你寫好;
    2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié),以使行文連貫。
    Dear Editor-in-Chief,
    Congratulations on the 5th anniversary of Global Mirror!
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    Sincerely yours,
    Li Hua
    范文【解析】
    本文為書信形式的應(yīng)用文寫作。信的開頭和結(jié)尾都已經(jīng)給出。題目中對文章結(jié)構(gòu)和部分內(nèi)容做出了提示,降低了寫作難度,考生可在此基礎(chǔ)上適當(dāng)添加細(xì)節(jié)。根據(jù)題目,文章的內(nèi)容分為3部分,一是“介紹自己為該報(bào)的忠實(shí)讀者”,二是該報(bào)的優(yōu)點(diǎn),三是給報(bào)刊提出建議。其中第二、三點(diǎn)為重點(diǎn)??忌砑拥膱?bào)刊優(yōu)點(diǎn)和建議應(yīng)當(dāng)合情合理,同時(shí)原因、建議不只一個(gè),因此一定要注意寫作的邏輯性,適當(dāng)運(yùn)用過渡性詞語,如besides,what’s more, finally等。為了提高文章的表達(dá)檔次,可以注意使用較復(fù)雜的句式(如定語從句、原因狀語從句、目的狀語從句)。
    【范文1】Dear Editor-in-Chief,
    Congratulations on the 5th anniversary of Global Mirror!
    I’m a regular reader of your Weekly and it is due to its two advantages that I show strong love for the newspaper. ②On one hand, it is a newspaper where readers can get the latest civil and foreign news in time. ③On the other hand②, there are many stories about how famous people succeeded, from which we can benefit a lot.④
    However, I still have a suggestion to make. If only the Weekly contained some articles guiding us through learning English⑤, it will be more than a newspaper for a middle school student. ⑥
    Sincerely yours,
    Li Hua
    【范文評析】
    本篇習(xí)作語言地道,覆蓋了所有要點(diǎn),雖只有94個(gè)詞,但在此中,眾多的高級句式結(jié)構(gòu)卻被作者運(yùn)用得恰到好處,如定語從句、強(qiáng)調(diào)結(jié)構(gòu)、賓語從句、虛擬語氣等。難能可貴的是,作者對寫作要點(diǎn)拿捏得很準(zhǔn),最后在提建議時(shí),適當(dāng)發(fā)揮,使得建議的意義更大。
    【詞句積累】
    ①使用強(qiáng)調(diào)結(jié)構(gòu),使得句型富有變化。
    ②用on one hand,on the other hand來代替庸俗的first(ly),second(ly),非常好!另外,還能增加字?jǐn)?shù)。
    ③在該句中使用where定語從句,顯示該考生的語法很強(qiáng)。
    ④介詞后的賓語從句,非限制性定語從句的應(yīng)用,令閱卷老師折服了。作者的巨型布局藝術(shù),其語法的嫻熟,并能得心應(yīng)手地收發(fā)自如,讓閱卷老 師贊賞。
    ⑤此處使用if only,謂語要用虛擬語氣,妙!妙!另外,guide sb. through doing sth. 體現(xiàn)該考生較強(qiáng)的詞匯運(yùn)用能力。
    ⑥more than是一個(gè)亮點(diǎn)表達(dá)。該句使短文的意義得到升華。
    【范文2】
    Dear Editor-in-Chief,
    Congratulations on the 5th anniversary of Global Mirror!
    I have been a faithful reader since Global Mirror started. ①
    It is the unique advantages of the newspaper that always attract my affection. ②For one thing③, the newspaper covers news both at home and abroad, which opens a window for us to learn what is happening in the world. ④For another③, stories about some famous people are introduced to readers, which tell of how they succeeded in what they did.
    The newspaper is indeed my best friend, but I think you’d better have some articles that can guide us to learn English. ⑤If so, it will have a larger audience of readers.
    Sincerely yours,
    Li Hua
    【范文評析】
    本篇習(xí)作一氣呵成,滴水不漏。運(yùn)用了一些高級句式結(jié)構(gòu)如強(qiáng)調(diào)句型,非限制性定語從句等。時(shí)態(tài)把握準(zhǔn)確到位,如since引導(dǎo)的現(xiàn)在完成時(shí),to learn后的現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí)等,使文章增色不少。總的來說是一篇好文章。
    【詞句積累】
    ①一開始就用since,時(shí)態(tài)正確,先聲奪人。
    ②使用強(qiáng)調(diào)句型,征服閱卷老師。
    ③用for one thing和for another代替平庸first和second,顯示作者的詞匯能力。
    ④非限制性定語從句的使用,to learn后的現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí)態(tài),無不讓人嘆服。
    ⑤巧妙地使用but,委婉,又達(dá)到提建議的目的。