Air travel only benefits the richest people. The majority of people cannot receive the advantages of the development of air travel. Do you agree or disagree?
Improved traffic technology(transportation technology) has made travelling means more various than ever before. People relish their journey by diverse transportation. Some people consider that air travel actually widen(widens) the gap between the rich and poor due to the only benefits it offers to the wealthy group, while the majority of average people are kept far away from the advantages of the development of air travel. Personally, I do not think this is the complete picture.
Admittedly, the cost of flight is much higher than the travelling expense by railway or some other means of transport. The price would be more likely twice or even triple that of trains or buses. Rich people may tend to enjoy its swiftness and comfortableness, while humble citizens prefer to take more care of their purse, giving ways to the endurance of filthy compartments and noisy surroundings in trains and buses.
Nevertheless, the less-wealthy folk(people) are not completely out of the gate. Due to the stagnant market and the fierce competition in the domain of civil aviation companies, plenty of preferential and promotion activities(programs) are offered to consumers which makes(make) air flight possible(affordable) for average people due to the diving price. (For example,) CAAC ever sliced 80% off from the original price to attract more passengers. What's more, some business people have to make the option of flying due to some urgent jobs no matter they are rich or not(no matter what kind of social economic status they are in).
From what discussed above(From what has been discussed above), it seems unreasonable to maintain that air travel offers convenience only to the wealthy people. It is bound to benefit more people, given the more prosperous marketing and more advanced air traffic system.
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專家點(diǎn)評(píng)：
本次考試的題目為論述“飛行”這種交通方式是否只對(duì)富人有利，而對(duì)于大多數(shù)人來(lái)說(shuō)并不能享受到這種交通方式的便利。
這道題的話題還是比較容易論述的：因?yàn)殡S著全球化的擴(kuò)張和深化，“飛行”已經(jīng)成為常用的旅行方式之一，成為了人們?nèi)粘Ｉ畹囊徊糠?。比如說(shuō)，在國(guó)內(nèi)正逢春運(yùn)高峰，而近幾年的春運(yùn)，并非只有鐵路和公路運(yùn)輸承擔(dān)著重大的壓力，航空公司也是一票難求。隨著人民生活水平的提高和航空運(yùn)輸業(yè)的發(fā)展，飛機(jī)票的價(jià)格也不像從前那樣的遙不可及。無(wú)論是公事還是私事，這種交通方式已經(jīng)被普遍應(yīng)用和接受。更何況，即使是普通人也有出國(guó)旅行的實(shí)力，那也是必然要選擇飛行的。再者來(lái)說(shuō)，目前通往機(jī)場(chǎng)的交通方式也得到了大幅的改觀。拿上海來(lái)說(shuō)，只要話上不到20元的價(jià)格，就能從市中心乘坐機(jī)場(chǎng)大巴到機(jī)場(chǎng)。即使是乘坐先進(jìn)的磁懸浮列車，花費(fèi)也不過在50元而已。這跟以往機(jī)場(chǎng)獨(dú)立于城市之外，沒有便捷的交通抵達(dá)的情況是不能相提并論的。
本次考生提供的范文在語(yǔ)言的表達(dá)上也是總體來(lái)說(shuō)符合英文行文要求的，除了有些地方的語(yǔ)言存在比較明顯的問題（請(qǐng)見紅色標(biāo)注修改部分）。在句式的靈活運(yùn)用和詞匯的選擇使用上不乏可圈可點(diǎn)之處。文章的論述也采取了帶有傾向性的雙邊論述方法，將作者的觀點(diǎn)表述清楚。文章若能在主體段的第二段將論述的內(nèi)容（如本文第二段所示）再進(jìn)行一點(diǎn)擴(kuò)展，將能起到更令人信服的論述效果。
本文的得分在6.5分左右。
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Improved traffic technology(transportation technology) has made travelling means more various than ever before. People relish their journey by diverse transportation. Some people consider that air travel actually widen(widens) the gap between the rich and poor due to the only benefits it offers to the wealthy group, while the majority of average people are kept far away from the advantages of the development of air travel. Personally, I do not think this is the complete picture.
Admittedly, the cost of flight is much higher than the travelling expense by railway or some other means of transport. The price would be more likely twice or even triple that of trains or buses. Rich people may tend to enjoy its swiftness and comfortableness, while humble citizens prefer to take more care of their purse, giving ways to the endurance of filthy compartments and noisy surroundings in trains and buses.
Nevertheless, the less-wealthy folk(people) are not completely out of the gate. Due to the stagnant market and the fierce competition in the domain of civil aviation companies, plenty of preferential and promotion activities(programs) are offered to consumers which makes(make) air flight possible(affordable) for average people due to the diving price. (For example,) CAAC ever sliced 80% off from the original price to attract more passengers. What's more, some business people have to make the option of flying due to some urgent jobs no matter they are rich or not(no matter what kind of social economic status they are in).
From what discussed above(From what has been discussed above), it seems unreasonable to maintain that air travel offers convenience only to the wealthy people. It is bound to benefit more people, given the more prosperous marketing and more advanced air traffic system.
- 268 words –
專家點(diǎn)評(píng)：
本次考試的題目為論述“飛行”這種交通方式是否只對(duì)富人有利，而對(duì)于大多數(shù)人來(lái)說(shuō)并不能享受到這種交通方式的便利。
這道題的話題還是比較容易論述的：因?yàn)殡S著全球化的擴(kuò)張和深化，“飛行”已經(jīng)成為常用的旅行方式之一，成為了人們?nèi)粘Ｉ畹囊徊糠?。比如說(shuō)，在國(guó)內(nèi)正逢春運(yùn)高峰，而近幾年的春運(yùn)，并非只有鐵路和公路運(yùn)輸承擔(dān)著重大的壓力，航空公司也是一票難求。隨著人民生活水平的提高和航空運(yùn)輸業(yè)的發(fā)展，飛機(jī)票的價(jià)格也不像從前那樣的遙不可及。無(wú)論是公事還是私事，這種交通方式已經(jīng)被普遍應(yīng)用和接受。更何況，即使是普通人也有出國(guó)旅行的實(shí)力，那也是必然要選擇飛行的。再者來(lái)說(shuō)，目前通往機(jī)場(chǎng)的交通方式也得到了大幅的改觀。拿上海來(lái)說(shuō)，只要話上不到20元的價(jià)格，就能從市中心乘坐機(jī)場(chǎng)大巴到機(jī)場(chǎng)。即使是乘坐先進(jìn)的磁懸浮列車，花費(fèi)也不過在50元而已。這跟以往機(jī)場(chǎng)獨(dú)立于城市之外，沒有便捷的交通抵達(dá)的情況是不能相提并論的。
本次考生提供的范文在語(yǔ)言的表達(dá)上也是總體來(lái)說(shuō)符合英文行文要求的，除了有些地方的語(yǔ)言存在比較明顯的問題（請(qǐng)見紅色標(biāo)注修改部分）。在句式的靈活運(yùn)用和詞匯的選擇使用上不乏可圈可點(diǎn)之處。文章的論述也采取了帶有傾向性的雙邊論述方法，將作者的觀點(diǎn)表述清楚。文章若能在主體段的第二段將論述的內(nèi)容（如本文第二段所示）再進(jìn)行一點(diǎn)擴(kuò)展，將能起到更令人信服的論述效果。
本文的得分在6.5分左右。
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