Gre寫作是美國所有作文考試中時刻最長而質(zhì)量要求最高的一類作文考試，而在短期內(nèi)提高gre寫作能力不是一天兩天可以完成額，所以我們在備考2011新gre寫作時必然要對問題問題深切的剖析，體味以下優(yōu)異范文的文章結(jié)構(gòu)，以提高新gre寫作的整體分?jǐn)?shù)。
Therearemanyschoolviolencesineachschool.Thosearebigproblemstoourgovenmentandsocial.Schoolviolenceseffectthestudyingofstudents.Thisisveryserious,evensomestudentsarenervioustogoschool.Infact,thegovernmentmustgivestudentsacleanplacetostudy.Teachersshouldhelpstudentsknowitisadutytostudy.So,everyoneshouldfacethosebigproblems.
Doweknowwhatarestudents’ideas?Dotheeducatorstrytoknow?Mosteducatorshopethegovenmentcangivestudentsmoreandhelpthemmore.Thesearepeople’shope.Butitissounfortunatethatstudentscan’thaveagoodplacetostudy.Also,teachershavetoteachthestudents.Notthatstudentscanknowwhattostudybythemself.Inthecompus,therearemanyguyssellthedrugsandacoholtoyoungerstudents.Whythoseguyscangointotheschool?Thatisalsothemainproblem. 中華考試網(wǎng)(www．liuxue86。com)
Whenwewerelittle,wedidn’tknowwhatiscorrectandwhatiswrong.Soweloseourselfeasily.Atthesametime,weneedmuchcarefromparentsandteachers.Soourteachersandparentsplaytheimportantrolesandtheyownmustdobetter.Becausesomestudentslearnsomebadhabitsfromtheirteachersandparents.
Ifwewanttoresolvealltheproblems,wemustfacetheproblemsandfindoutthereasons,thentrytoresolvethem.Wealsomustcareallstudents.Ifwecanhelpthem,tringtodoourbest.Then,theproblemswillbecomelessandless.
COMMENTARY
Thisisaseriouslyflawedresponsetothetopic.Thewriterbeginsbydiscussingschoolviolenceandtheneedforagoodplacetostudy,parentalandteacherinfluence,andresolutionofschoolproblems.Theissueofwhoshoulddeterminethecurriculum,teachersorstudents,isimpliedbutnotaddresseddirectly.Infact,teacher-directedlearningseemstobeasmallpointinaseriesofconcernsrelatedtoschoolviolence.Thedevelopmentofapositionontheissueisunfocusedanddisorganized.Eventheexample,drugselling,relatestoschoolviolenceandnottocurricularresponsibility.
Languageerrorsarenumerous.Problemswithcorrectuseoftense,diction,wordorder,sentencestructure,andsubject-verbagreementalsointerferewithmeaning.Hadthewriternotincludedreferencestoteachershelpingstudentsknowwhattostudy,theessaywouldprobablyhavereceivedascoreof1insteadofa2. 感謝您閱讀《歷年GRE考試Issue主題范文及評析29 》一文，出國留學(xué)網(wǎng)(liuxue86.com)編輯部希望本文能幫助到您。
Therearemanyschoolviolencesineachschool.Thosearebigproblemstoourgovenmentandsocial.Schoolviolenceseffectthestudyingofstudents.Thisisveryserious,evensomestudentsarenervioustogoschool.Infact,thegovernmentmustgivestudentsacleanplacetostudy.Teachersshouldhelpstudentsknowitisadutytostudy.So,everyoneshouldfacethosebigproblems.
Doweknowwhatarestudents’ideas?Dotheeducatorstrytoknow?Mosteducatorshopethegovenmentcangivestudentsmoreandhelpthemmore.Thesearepeople’shope.Butitissounfortunatethatstudentscan’thaveagoodplacetostudy.Also,teachershavetoteachthestudents.Notthatstudentscanknowwhattostudybythemself.Inthecompus,therearemanyguyssellthedrugsandacoholtoyoungerstudents.Whythoseguyscangointotheschool?Thatisalsothemainproblem. 中華考試網(wǎng)(www．liuxue86。com)
Whenwewerelittle,wedidn’tknowwhatiscorrectandwhatiswrong.Soweloseourselfeasily.Atthesametime,weneedmuchcarefromparentsandteachers.Soourteachersandparentsplaytheimportantrolesandtheyownmustdobetter.Becausesomestudentslearnsomebadhabitsfromtheirteachersandparents.
Ifwewanttoresolvealltheproblems,wemustfacetheproblemsandfindoutthereasons,thentrytoresolvethem.Wealsomustcareallstudents.Ifwecanhelpthem,tringtodoourbest.Then,theproblemswillbecomelessandless.
COMMENTARY
Thisisaseriouslyflawedresponsetothetopic.Thewriterbeginsbydiscussingschoolviolenceandtheneedforagoodplacetostudy,parentalandteacherinfluence,andresolutionofschoolproblems.Theissueofwhoshoulddeterminethecurriculum,teachersorstudents,isimpliedbutnotaddresseddirectly.Infact,teacher-directedlearningseemstobeasmallpointinaseriesofconcernsrelatedtoschoolviolence.Thedevelopmentofapositionontheissueisunfocusedanddisorganized.Eventheexample,drugselling,relatestoschoolviolenceandnottocurricularresponsibility.
Languageerrorsarenumerous.Problemswithcorrectuseoftense,diction,wordorder,sentencestructure,andsubject-verbagreementalsointerferewithmeaning.Hadthewriternotincludedreferencestoteachershelpingstudentsknowwhattostudy,theessaywouldprobablyhavereceivedascoreof1insteadofa2. 感謝您閱讀《歷年GRE考試Issue主題范文及評析29 》一文，出國留學(xué)網(wǎng)(liuxue86.com)編輯部希望本文能幫助到您。