TOEFL Essay: 晚睡晚起【海外投稿】

謝振禮老師海外投稿
    
    早睡早起身體好—好像是小學(xué)生的作文題。富蘭克林的名言常被引用來(lái)支持此論點(diǎn)。一早就起床干活，還可以發(fā)財(cái)，又帶來(lái)智慧。信不信由你。
    托福寫作測(cè)驗(yàn)有一個(gè)真題。有人喜歡早起，開(kāi)始工作。另外有些人喜歡晚起，然后工作到很晚。你喜歡那一種？寫出有關(guān)的理由和例證，以支持你的選擇。
    乍看之下，工作肯定與金錢有關(guān)，早睡早起還不是心想多干活賺鈔票。好習(xí)慣帶來(lái)好健康。有錢又有好身體，選擇早起，看來(lái)是聰明之舉。下文的創(chuàng)造是為了好玩，試用不同的邏輯。
    
     >Some people prefer to get up early in the morning and start the day's work. Others prefer to get up later in the day and work until late at night. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
    中文英文大意對(duì)照
    1.當(dāng)今如果想成功，可要起得早睡得晚，還要有好運(yùn)當(dāng)頭。富蘭克林的明智之言，雖事隔兩百多年 ，還是有些道理。早上早起，迎接新的一天，算是健康之舉。不過(guò)光是早起，不見(jiàn)得給一般人帶來(lái)財(cái)富與智慧。
    Nowadays the formula for success is rise early, work late and strike it rich. The wisdom of Benjamin Franklin may in part be as true today as it was more than two centuries ago. Getting up early in the morning is always a healthy way to greet a new day, but that alone cannot always make an average person wealthy or wise.
    2.人要發(fā)財(cái)，靠運(yùn)氣遠(yuǎn)超過(guò)靠工作習(xí)慣。運(yùn)氣好比起得早更來(lái)的實(shí)在，因?yàn)橐粋€(gè)人一早忙著 工作，了不起只是抓幾個(gè)機(jī)會(huì)多掙幾個(gè)錢。許多人被生活所逼，不得不一早便起床上工。然而，早睡的人幾乎好像在現(xiàn)實(shí)社會(huì)中變成被遺忘的人，沒(méi)有考慮到今日的社會(huì)不流行舊日的清教徒生活方式。要知道，社會(huì)活動(dòng)對(duì)經(jīng)濟(jì)成就非常重要，早睡的意思就如同放棄經(jīng)濟(jì)活動(dòng)。難怪有進(jìn)取的人常保持活動(dòng)到夜晚，一則發(fā)展事業(yè)，一則多碰運(yùn)氣。
    To be wealthy is more a matter of luck than a habit of work. It sounds more likely that good luck beats early rising, in the sense that one has to hurry to work just to seize more opportunities in the hope of gaining a few dollars more. Starting early the day's work is an obligation of many working people. However, going to bed early may indicate being almost socially dead in modern society which of course is not as puritan as it used to be. In fact, early to bed means the lack of social activities critical to economic success. Accordingly, the more agressive people stay active until late at night, actively advancing in their careers while seeking to be lucky.
    3.要不是為了一成不變的工作時(shí)間表，選在尖峰時(shí)間之刻沖去上班，可能是不智之舉。別的不說(shuō)，此舉會(huì)遇上常有的交通阻塞。接著整天都覺(jué)得難過(guò)。提一個(gè)似非而是的比喻，一個(gè)人好似變成早起的小蟲(chóng)，如果壞運(yùn)臨頭，肯定碰上吃蟲(chóng)的小鳥(niǎo)。所以，如果可以，寧可晚一點(diǎn)兒起床，工作到晚，這樣更接近實(shí)際。這樣一來(lái)，即可除去無(wú)聊，又增加工作情趣，又享受夜晚生活，甚至可以改變命運(yùn)。說(shuō)來(lái)難過(guò)，倒也是事實(shí)，非早起不可的人，一般是指無(wú)一技之長(zhǎng)的苦工，別無(wú)選擇?？傊?，日出到日落汗淋淋，大多數(shù)人僅足糊口，極少人因此變得更聰明，也很少人相信智慧與乖乖早睡，而故意錯(cuò)過(guò)心愛(ài)的深夜電視節(jié)目，息息相關(guān)。
    Were it not for the routine working schedule, it would be very unwise to rush to one's workplace during the peak hours. For one thing, one may often get caught in the usual traffic congestion, thus becoming stressed the rest of the day. Paradoxically, it is as if one were to become the early worm that unluckily gets the bird. Whenever possible, it would seem more practical to get up later in the day and work until late at night to get rid of boredom, to have more fun in the day's work, to enjoy the night's life, and to make a difference in fate. Sad but true, early to rise may refer to unskilled labor that cannot do otherwise. After all, although by sweating from dawn to dusk many are able to make ends meet, few actually believe that they can become wiser by faithfully going to bed early, and purposefully missing a favorite midnight television program.
    4. 也許只要改變?cè)缤淼臅r(shí)刻表，就有機(jī)會(huì)改變一生。既定的工作表，既不能應(yīng)許財(cái)富，有不能加力智慧。富蘭克林之言仍然深具鼓舞人心，但是也未必要全信智者之語(yǔ)，以為財(cái)富與智慧在握。問(wèn)題是早起，可以，如果對(duì)健康有好處。工作到夜晚，有人干，也有人不干。早睡，幾乎不可能，原因大家都明白。
    Perhaps life may change for the better by changing the sunrise-to-sunset schedule that neither promises wealth nor enpowers wisdom. Inspirational as Franklin's words remain, nobody has to take this wise man's advice seriously now in order to become rich and intelligent. Early to rise? Yes, if only for better health. To work late? Some do but others don't. Early to bed? Next to impossible and everybody knows why.
    
    作者補(bǔ)充解釋四段結(jié)構(gòu)是圓形寫作的起承轉(zhuǎn)合。主題有焦點(diǎn)。結(jié)構(gòu)有組織。內(nèi)容有支持。全文唱反調(diào)，賣風(fēng)騷，未必觀點(diǎn)正確，歡迎網(wǎng)友指教。
    1.起段申論主題，談早起晚起的優(yōu)劣。焦點(diǎn)集中在強(qiáng)調(diào)運(yùn)氣好有勝于早起工作。一分為二。工作與財(cái)富。又工作與智慧。
    2.承段支持主題，提出理由例證細(xì)節(jié)，說(shuō)明早起晚起與致富，幾乎毫無(wú)相關(guān)。
    3.轉(zhuǎn)段支持主題，提出理由例證細(xì)節(jié)，說(shuō)明早起晚起與智慧，幾乎毫無(wú)關(guān)系。
    4.合段重申主題，不忘還原焦點(diǎn)，要點(diǎn)財(cái)富和要點(diǎn)智慧，二合為一，結(jié)論說(shuō)明早起工作，至少對(duì)健康有益，可是與財(cái)富和智慧，幾乎毫無(wú)關(guān)聯(lián)。