托福寫作三連環(huán) 助你寫作得高分(3)

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    本段從 “rose”(起床)寫起,然后是吃早餐(“not to miss breakfast”, “closing at nine o‘clock”),然后是 “close to noon”,一直寫到這一天結束(“By nine”)。
    B. 按位置遠近排列(spatial arrangement)。例如:
    From a distance, it looked like a skinny tube, but as we got closer, we could see it flesh out before our eyes. It was tubular, all right, but fatter than we could see from far away. Furthermore, we were also astonished to notice that the building was really in two parts: a pagoda sitting on top of a tubular one-story structure. Standing ten feet away, we could marvel at how much of the pagoda was made up of glass windows. Almost everything under the wonderful Chinese roof was made of glass, unlike the tube that it was sitting on, which only had four. Inside, the tube was gloomy, because of the lack of light. Then a steep, narrow staircase took us up inside the pagoda and the light changed dramatically. All those windows let in a flood of sunshine and we could see out for miles across the flat land.
    本段的寫法是由遠及近,從遠處(“from a distance”)寫起,然后“get closer”,再到(“ten feet away”),最后是 “inside the pagoda”……當然,按位置遠近來寫不等于都是由遠及近。根據(jù)需要,也可以由近及遠,由表及里等等。
    以上就是托福寫作中段落內容的安排,要注意的是句子的排列順序必須合乎邏輯,從一個句子到另一個句子的過渡必須流暢,要有連貫性,不能左一句右一句企圖以難詞多取勝,或者用些復雜句型,一篇好文章的基礎,就是文章段落安排的讓人覺得舒服合理。