復(fù)賽試題：
Directions:
With the development of computers, more and more people are working with computers. But, we know that computers are harmful as well as useful and helpful .Here, you are asked to write an essay on the topic “The Advantages and Disadvantages of Computers”. You can give some examples and facts to support your opinion. Your essay should be written in English with no less than 300 words within 60 minutes.
The Advantages and Disadvantages of Computers
李彥妮
遼寧市鞍山市第一中學(xué)10屆14班
Nowadays, the idea of progress loorns so large in the modern world, and the progress of a particular kind is actually taking place around us. In this circumstances, computers which have a great help come out with the wisdom and hard-working of human beings. It do have given human a tremendous help, it, however, has brought to us its harmness at the some time.
The computers can make a great help for us in this high speed society. In the light of this statement, it is computers that can store documents for us which is essential for us, it is computers that can shorten the time in seeking useful information instead of looking for knowledge from a large sums of books and it is computers that can make it possible to comunicate with different people who are far away from you. In a word, we can't live nomally without computers in such a high-tech society.
On the contary, having helped us a lot, computers are harmful to people at the same time, especially the adolescents. First of all, sitting in front of the computer may do harm to our eyes. On the other hand, computers not only bring us useful information but also entertainments. Being weak in controlling themselves, those poor adolescents are more easier to get crazy about the fantasy world. Seeing a vivid picture which is about a son who gets stuck in computers and phones to his parents downstairs to bring dinner for him. I realized deeply that the computers really have their disadvantages.
According to the statements above, it can not be superficial to simply say that computers are good or bad for us as every coin has both sides. Personally, I still consider that a computer can bring us convinience and high speed which is extolled to all the people even though it is a two-edged weapon. We can learn well punctuated by those purchasable wells of wisdom - computers.
專家建議：
本文個(gè)別語言使用不夠地道并且偶爾出現(xiàn)句子表意不明的情況，因此建議該考生在平時(shí)的學(xué)習(xí)中盡量多閱讀原汁原味的英語(論壇)文章，有意識地積累地道的英語表達(dá)，不斷提高語言運(yùn)用能力。
專家點(diǎn)評：
本篇文章段落結(jié)構(gòu)基本清晰，第一段交代文章主題，第二段主要說明計(jì)算機(jī)的優(yōu)勢，第三段羅列計(jì)算機(jī)給人們帶來的害處，最后一段是對文章的總結(jié)和作者個(gè)人看法，整篇文章思路比較清晰。文章用詞較為準(zhǔn)確，也出現(xiàn)了不少詞組及句型，語法多樣性也有所體現(xiàn)。能看出這絕對是高中生中佼佼者完成的文章。不足之處在于有個(gè)別語言點(diǎn)不夠地道，希望以后能進(jìn)一步雕琢語言，使寫作水平進(jìn)一步提升。
Directions:
With the development of computers, more and more people are working with computers. But, we know that computers are harmful as well as useful and helpful .Here, you are asked to write an essay on the topic “The Advantages and Disadvantages of Computers”. You can give some examples and facts to support your opinion. Your essay should be written in English with no less than 300 words within 60 minutes.
The Advantages and Disadvantages of Computers
李彥妮
遼寧市鞍山市第一中學(xué)10屆14班
Nowadays, the idea of progress loorns so large in the modern world, and the progress of a particular kind is actually taking place around us. In this circumstances, computers which have a great help come out with the wisdom and hard-working of human beings. It do have given human a tremendous help, it, however, has brought to us its harmness at the some time.
The computers can make a great help for us in this high speed society. In the light of this statement, it is computers that can store documents for us which is essential for us, it is computers that can shorten the time in seeking useful information instead of looking for knowledge from a large sums of books and it is computers that can make it possible to comunicate with different people who are far away from you. In a word, we can't live nomally without computers in such a high-tech society.
On the contary, having helped us a lot, computers are harmful to people at the same time, especially the adolescents. First of all, sitting in front of the computer may do harm to our eyes. On the other hand, computers not only bring us useful information but also entertainments. Being weak in controlling themselves, those poor adolescents are more easier to get crazy about the fantasy world. Seeing a vivid picture which is about a son who gets stuck in computers and phones to his parents downstairs to bring dinner for him. I realized deeply that the computers really have their disadvantages.
According to the statements above, it can not be superficial to simply say that computers are good or bad for us as every coin has both sides. Personally, I still consider that a computer can bring us convinience and high speed which is extolled to all the people even though it is a two-edged weapon. We can learn well punctuated by those purchasable wells of wisdom - computers.
專家建議：
本文個(gè)別語言使用不夠地道并且偶爾出現(xiàn)句子表意不明的情況，因此建議該考生在平時(shí)的學(xué)習(xí)中盡量多閱讀原汁原味的英語(論壇)文章，有意識地積累地道的英語表達(dá)，不斷提高語言運(yùn)用能力。
專家點(diǎn)評：
本篇文章段落結(jié)構(gòu)基本清晰，第一段交代文章主題，第二段主要說明計(jì)算機(jī)的優(yōu)勢，第三段羅列計(jì)算機(jī)給人們帶來的害處，最后一段是對文章的總結(jié)和作者個(gè)人看法，整篇文章思路比較清晰。文章用詞較為準(zhǔn)確，也出現(xiàn)了不少詞組及句型，語法多樣性也有所體現(xiàn)。能看出這絕對是高中生中佼佼者完成的文章。不足之處在于有個(gè)別語言點(diǎn)不夠地道，希望以后能進(jìn)一步雕琢語言，使寫作水平進(jìn)一步提升。