2010年10月9日SAT考試:作文真題(含點(diǎn)評(píng))

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10月9日SAT作文真題回顧
    10月SAT作文題目
    Is it better to adapt yourself to new circumstances, or is it better to just remain unchanged?(同學(xué)回憶版本)   
    題目翻譯:是改變自己適應(yīng)新環(huán)境,還是不改變自己(而改變環(huán)境)。   
    題目分析:本題是一個(gè)選擇式的任務(wù)。任務(wù)要求考生能夠二選一,并且能體現(xiàn)出為什么選前者而不是后者。
     
    思考過(guò)程:根據(jù)例子提煉觀點(diǎn)和正文例子邏輯。
    1 想例子
    筆者最喜歡的人物例子是美國(guó)自行車運(yùn)動(dòng)員Lance Armstrong,他在1996年被查出得了癌癥,面對(duì)此新情況,他選擇改變自己以前不聽(tīng)話的性格,去聽(tīng)從醫(yī)生意見(jiàn),和醫(yī)護(hù)人員合作來(lái)克服癌癥,適應(yīng)這個(gè)新環(huán)境,最后成功并且復(fù)出奪得環(huán)法冠軍。   
    2 提煉觀點(diǎn)
    觀點(diǎn)是應(yīng)該改變自己適應(yīng)新環(huán)境,因?yàn)槿绻桓淖儯涂赡軙?huì)無(wú)法存活。   
    3 中間段例子邏輯
    本文的題眼是:新環(huán)境——改變自己——結(jié)果較好(這樣才能體現(xiàn)better)   
    所以整個(gè)例子的邏輯鏈?zhǔn)牵涸?jīng)的Lance 很頑固,不聽(tīng)任何人的建議——后來(lái)得了癌癥——改變自己的性格,變得比較cooperative——最后戰(zhàn)勝癌癥,取得環(huán)法冠軍。   
    其中對(duì)于邏輯鏈的細(xì)節(jié)補(bǔ)充很重要,那么怎么知道這些細(xì)節(jié)呢?這就要大家提前做好對(duì)人物素材的整理,以便在考試時(shí)選擇性使用。   
    4 細(xì)節(jié)補(bǔ)充 (此處資料取自筆者2010年上半年SAT作文回顧的文章)
    1) 曾經(jīng)的性格
    He was stubborn. He didn’t understand the strategy of holding a little energy in reserve.
    First race: 1990 Amateur World Championship in Japan. The race, held on a very hot day, was 115 miles long with a difficult uphill section. Chris wanted Lance to draft--- to stay behind other riders and save some energy for the end of the race. But Lance didn’t listen to his coach. He was overconfident and quickly pedaled to a big lead. The lead grew to almost 90 seconds, but Lance was exhausting himself. He got tired and slowed down. His lead fell to a minute, than to 30 seconds. Soon the peloton had caught him. Lance couldn’t mount a charge at the end. He could only slide back into the draft and finish eleventh.
    提示:之前完全不聽(tīng)教練的話。  
    Impatience was not Lance’s only problem during races. His aggressive style also got him into trouble. He didn’t give his opponents any respect. He would shout at them and insult them during races. He wouldn’t work with his own teammates. He would show them up(使難堪), just to prove that he was better. In response other riders sometimes got in his way on purpose and tried to slow him down. They refused to draft with him. By being selfish, Lance was isolating him.
    提示:比較粗魯,自大,不給對(duì)手尊重,不和隊(duì)員合作?! ?BR>    2) 得癌癥
    At the age 25, the doctor Reeves said that he suffered testicular cancer. The cancer had spread from his testicle to his lungs.   
    3) 如何轉(zhuǎn)變性格   
     <1> 聽(tīng)醫(yī)生話做手術(shù)
    Surgery to remove his testicle, three hours, success. Next three months, he need a powerful chemotherapy,, a kind of cancer treatment that can be very hard on the patient.
     <2> 同醫(yī)生交流
    Lance talked to his doctors about his treatment and hoped that they could use drugs that wouldn’t’t destroy his muscles or hurt his chance of returning to cycling someday.
     
    4) 結(jié)果——成功
    Finally, the whole therapy was over. The early tests were promising. After deep thought, he decided to start training again. He wanted to return for the 1998 season.
    More than that, he became the championship in Tour-de-France for the next seven years.