本課的寫(xiě)作實(shí)際上也屬于your opinion的作文。對(duì)這類文章寫(xiě)作的注意事項(xiàng)，我們要注意其寫(xiě)作方法：
首段明確表達(dá)你所贊同的具體觀點(diǎn);主題段落用具體的理由或事例支持你所提出的觀點(diǎn)。結(jié)尾段重申首段觀點(diǎn)。
1.你認(rèn)為55歲退休這一傳統(tǒng)好嗎?
2.你有什么建議?
3.為什么要提出這樣的建議，有何道理?
4.用相關(guān)的證據(jù)來(lái)證明你的觀點(diǎn)。
這四點(diǎn)寫(xiě)作要求要明確反映在文章中，千萬(wàn)不能遺漏。整篇文章的寫(xiě)作應(yīng)該在上述幾個(gè)問(wèn)題展開(kāi)，不要漫無(wú)邊際地寫(xiě)。只要符合要求的文章才能獲得理想的分?jǐn)?shù)。
寫(xiě)作提綱
本文根據(jù)題目要求可以分為四個(gè)自然段來(lái)寫(xiě)：
首段：明確闡明自己的觀點(diǎn)，即對(duì)中國(guó)普通工人要在55歲退休這一傳統(tǒng)風(fēng)俗的看法。本文的看法是，這種看法已經(jīng)不合適宜，應(yīng)該廢止了。
主題段落：分兩段來(lái)寫(xiě)。
第一段具體論述為什么這一風(fēng)俗已經(jīng)不合適宜，指出具體的原因和表現(xiàn)。比如：決定是否讓一個(gè)人退休，應(yīng)該從他的業(yè)績(jī)判斷，而不是單純看他的年齡;年老的工人比年輕的工人有時(shí)侯技術(shù)更純熟、工作經(jīng)驗(yàn)更豐富。
第二段主要是針對(duì)這種情況提出自己的建議和解決辦法，并且說(shuō)明為什么要提出這樣的建議。如：人如果失去工作，容易變的孤獨(dú)，不利于健康;再者，人的壽命在延長(zhǎng)，所以工作年限也應(yīng)該延長(zhǎng)。具體建議是：只要一個(gè)人的健康狀況允許并且能繼續(xù)勝任工作，就可以一直工作下去。
結(jié)尾段：對(duì)自己的觀點(diǎn)進(jìn)行簡(jiǎn)要的總結(jié)。提出退休的新標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，即衡量一個(gè)人是否仍然能做好工作，不是單純地看一個(gè)人是不是達(dá)到了某個(gè)年齡。得出結(jié)論，這一傳統(tǒng)風(fēng)俗應(yīng)該廢止了。
參考范文
Retirement
Retirement age varies from country to country, perhaps a reflection of economics, population pressures or simply value systems. In China, there is a traditional custom for the workers to retire at the age of 55 and stay at home enjoying the life for the rest of their lives. In my opinion, this custom is no linger appropriate in our society. I believe something should be done to change this situation.
Nobody will deny that the age is not always a true indicator of real ability. While some sixty-year -olds may not perform as well as they did in the past, many workers at this age can still do as well or better than they used to. people’s suitability for a position should be a reflection of their performance in the job, rather than the number of wrinkles or grey hairs they have. Employers who are concerned about the age of their employees should notice their job records. The old who are doing poorly should be asked to retire, but those who are still qualified for the job should stay on. In fact, the company or organization will benefit from doing so, because they will save a lot of money and energy by retaining their older employees. otherwise, they have to spend both time and money on training new workers, who are not necessarily as skilled as the older workers.
My suggestion is that as long as people are suitable for their positions they should be allowed to continue their work. The sense of responsibility plays an important role in the old people’s physical and mental health. Since life expectancies increase in china, people should remain in their jobs for as long as they are able. It makes great sense. As people live longer, they contribute more to society in the form of meaningful work. Meanwhile, some of them are still in great need of income to support their daily life. on the other hand, the old may feel sad and lonely without their job. It is obvious that a retirement of 55 for someone who is likely to live to 80 becomes increasingly difficult to justify.
In a word, the workers who are still strong enough to do their work should not be asked to retire simply because they have reached a certain age. The traditional custom that obliges average workers to retire at 55 should be given up.
首段明確表達(dá)你所贊同的具體觀點(diǎn);主題段落用具體的理由或事例支持你所提出的觀點(diǎn)。結(jié)尾段重申首段觀點(diǎn)。
1.你認(rèn)為55歲退休這一傳統(tǒng)好嗎?
2.你有什么建議?
3.為什么要提出這樣的建議，有何道理?
4.用相關(guān)的證據(jù)來(lái)證明你的觀點(diǎn)。
這四點(diǎn)寫(xiě)作要求要明確反映在文章中，千萬(wàn)不能遺漏。整篇文章的寫(xiě)作應(yīng)該在上述幾個(gè)問(wèn)題展開(kāi)，不要漫無(wú)邊際地寫(xiě)。只要符合要求的文章才能獲得理想的分?jǐn)?shù)。
寫(xiě)作提綱
本文根據(jù)題目要求可以分為四個(gè)自然段來(lái)寫(xiě)：
首段：明確闡明自己的觀點(diǎn)，即對(duì)中國(guó)普通工人要在55歲退休這一傳統(tǒng)風(fēng)俗的看法。本文的看法是，這種看法已經(jīng)不合適宜，應(yīng)該廢止了。
主題段落：分兩段來(lái)寫(xiě)。
第一段具體論述為什么這一風(fēng)俗已經(jīng)不合適宜，指出具體的原因和表現(xiàn)。比如：決定是否讓一個(gè)人退休，應(yīng)該從他的業(yè)績(jī)判斷，而不是單純看他的年齡;年老的工人比年輕的工人有時(shí)侯技術(shù)更純熟、工作經(jīng)驗(yàn)更豐富。
第二段主要是針對(duì)這種情況提出自己的建議和解決辦法，并且說(shuō)明為什么要提出這樣的建議。如：人如果失去工作，容易變的孤獨(dú)，不利于健康;再者，人的壽命在延長(zhǎng)，所以工作年限也應(yīng)該延長(zhǎng)。具體建議是：只要一個(gè)人的健康狀況允許并且能繼續(xù)勝任工作，就可以一直工作下去。
結(jié)尾段：對(duì)自己的觀點(diǎn)進(jìn)行簡(jiǎn)要的總結(jié)。提出退休的新標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，即衡量一個(gè)人是否仍然能做好工作，不是單純地看一個(gè)人是不是達(dá)到了某個(gè)年齡。得出結(jié)論，這一傳統(tǒng)風(fēng)俗應(yīng)該廢止了。
參考范文
Retirement
Retirement age varies from country to country, perhaps a reflection of economics, population pressures or simply value systems. In China, there is a traditional custom for the workers to retire at the age of 55 and stay at home enjoying the life for the rest of their lives. In my opinion, this custom is no linger appropriate in our society. I believe something should be done to change this situation.
Nobody will deny that the age is not always a true indicator of real ability. While some sixty-year -olds may not perform as well as they did in the past, many workers at this age can still do as well or better than they used to. people’s suitability for a position should be a reflection of their performance in the job, rather than the number of wrinkles or grey hairs they have. Employers who are concerned about the age of their employees should notice their job records. The old who are doing poorly should be asked to retire, but those who are still qualified for the job should stay on. In fact, the company or organization will benefit from doing so, because they will save a lot of money and energy by retaining their older employees. otherwise, they have to spend both time and money on training new workers, who are not necessarily as skilled as the older workers.
My suggestion is that as long as people are suitable for their positions they should be allowed to continue their work. The sense of responsibility plays an important role in the old people’s physical and mental health. Since life expectancies increase in china, people should remain in their jobs for as long as they are able. It makes great sense. As people live longer, they contribute more to society in the form of meaningful work. Meanwhile, some of them are still in great need of income to support their daily life. on the other hand, the old may feel sad and lonely without their job. It is obvious that a retirement of 55 for someone who is likely to live to 80 becomes increasingly difficult to justify.
In a word, the workers who are still strong enough to do their work should not be asked to retire simply because they have reached a certain age. The traditional custom that obliges average workers to retire at 55 should be given up.