II. Editorial Comments
1. Original: There are numerous reasons why to work for a large company, and I would in here explain a few of the most important ones. Revised: There are many reasons to work for a large company, and I herein explain a few of the most important ones.
不定式短語to work for a large company可以直接修飾numerous reasons，這里不必使用why這個引導(dǎo)詞；“I would in here explain”中的would一詞的使用也讓人莫名其妙：明明在文中馬上就加以解釋，又何必加入這樣一個含有不確定意味的助動詞呢？
2. Original: It is easy to see that working in the Microsoft has more positions to compete, parallel other small computer companies. Revised: It is easy to see that jobs at big companies such as Microsoft offer more opportunities for promotion than those at other small software companies.
這里，作者是要以微軟為例把大公司和小型公司進(jìn)行對比。而用“Microsoft has more positions to compete”卻說得是“微軟需要競爭更多職位”，就像“I have some homework to do”一樣，所以把愿意給歪曲了。
3. Original: We may acquaint with every department in a short time because the company is small and has fewer branches. Revised: For example, we could quickly become acquainted with every department because the company is small and has fewer branches.
不區(qū)分 “使……”的動詞是長見的用詞錯誤，這里“acquaint”是“是熟識”的意思，要說“熟識”就得用become acquainted了；另外，“in a short time”是說很快，但它的意思是“下來的一段很短的時間”，就像“in two days”一樣的。
III. Alternative Expressions
A. The use of a verb such as “to oppose” is common in essays debating between two topics. It is thus important to be familiar with alternative expressions:
(i) “to be firmly against” – Example: Since Daryl could not swim, he was firmly against the class taking a boat trip and instead supported the idea of a hiking trip.
(ii) “to be dead set against” – Example: The racecar driver was so competitive that he was dead set against any possibility of loosing the final race.
B. The phrase “easy to see” refers to something that is obvious and transparent. Example: Although he was shy, it was easy to see that he liked her very much. Alternative expressions include:
(i) “plain as my face” – Example: The fact that he dislikes his work is as plain as my face.
(ii) “as clear as the writing on the wall” – Example: It was his first date with a girl and he was very nervous and shy. It was as clear as the writing on the wall that he didn’t know what to do.
(iii) “l(fā)ike the back of my hand” – Example: After working as a tour guide in Beijing for over ten years, she knew the Forbidden City and Summer Palace like the back of her hand.
C. The expression “to far outweigh” signifies the greatness of one over another. Example: Although there were some business risks involved, the potential profit far outweighed the risks. Aside from using “weight” to emphasize something being bigger/greater/better than another thing, other similar expressions include:
(i) “to pale in comparison” – Example: Although the new Nokia cell phone had many new features, it paled in comparison to Motorola’s new cell phone.
(ii) “to overshadow” – Example: The student’s desire to study for the TOEFL overshadowed their desire to take a break during the May holidays.
(iii) “to take the cake” – Example: Despite both teams having convincing arguments in the debate contest, our team’s final argument took the cake.
1. Original: There are numerous reasons why to work for a large company, and I would in here explain a few of the most important ones. Revised: There are many reasons to work for a large company, and I herein explain a few of the most important ones.
不定式短語to work for a large company可以直接修飾numerous reasons，這里不必使用why這個引導(dǎo)詞；“I would in here explain”中的would一詞的使用也讓人莫名其妙：明明在文中馬上就加以解釋，又何必加入這樣一個含有不確定意味的助動詞呢？
2. Original: It is easy to see that working in the Microsoft has more positions to compete, parallel other small computer companies. Revised: It is easy to see that jobs at big companies such as Microsoft offer more opportunities for promotion than those at other small software companies.
這里，作者是要以微軟為例把大公司和小型公司進(jìn)行對比。而用“Microsoft has more positions to compete”卻說得是“微軟需要競爭更多職位”，就像“I have some homework to do”一樣，所以把愿意給歪曲了。
3. Original: We may acquaint with every department in a short time because the company is small and has fewer branches. Revised: For example, we could quickly become acquainted with every department because the company is small and has fewer branches.
不區(qū)分 “使……”的動詞是長見的用詞錯誤，這里“acquaint”是“是熟識”的意思，要說“熟識”就得用become acquainted了；另外，“in a short time”是說很快，但它的意思是“下來的一段很短的時間”，就像“in two days”一樣的。
III. Alternative Expressions
A. The use of a verb such as “to oppose” is common in essays debating between two topics. It is thus important to be familiar with alternative expressions:
(i) “to be firmly against” – Example: Since Daryl could not swim, he was firmly against the class taking a boat trip and instead supported the idea of a hiking trip.
(ii) “to be dead set against” – Example: The racecar driver was so competitive that he was dead set against any possibility of loosing the final race.
B. The phrase “easy to see” refers to something that is obvious and transparent. Example: Although he was shy, it was easy to see that he liked her very much. Alternative expressions include:
(i) “plain as my face” – Example: The fact that he dislikes his work is as plain as my face.
(ii) “as clear as the writing on the wall” – Example: It was his first date with a girl and he was very nervous and shy. It was as clear as the writing on the wall that he didn’t know what to do.
(iii) “l(fā)ike the back of my hand” – Example: After working as a tour guide in Beijing for over ten years, she knew the Forbidden City and Summer Palace like the back of her hand.
C. The expression “to far outweigh” signifies the greatness of one over another. Example: Although there were some business risks involved, the potential profit far outweighed the risks. Aside from using “weight” to emphasize something being bigger/greater/better than another thing, other similar expressions include:
(i) “to pale in comparison” – Example: Although the new Nokia cell phone had many new features, it paled in comparison to Motorola’s new cell phone.
(ii) “to overshadow” – Example: The student’s desire to study for the TOEFL overshadowed their desire to take a break during the May holidays.
(iii) “to take the cake” – Example: Despite both teams having convincing arguments in the debate contest, our team’s final argument took the cake.