Some students want to attend a university in their home country, others desire to study abroad. What is a better way to get education? Give specific reasons.
Have you noticed the increasing number of people going to university aboard year by year? Those who have gotten advanced education in world-famous universities abroad are sharing their knowledge learned from foreign teachers with their native colleagues. To some extent, they have reached certain achievements in all kinds of areas. Generally speaking, when faced with the decision whether to study in a domestic university or receive advanced education abroad, every person has his standpoint and his specific reasons. As far as I am concerned, it is more considerable to study abroad. Afterwards, I will explain my opinions about it.
ETS的官方指導(dǎo)上說introductory要寫三部分，一開頭就要求是hook,我準備諺語是來不及了，就想用問句。可是寫出來怪怪的，又長又臭，可能還是不寫得好，跳過這一步。
First and foremost, universities in my homeland could not provide us satisfactory advanced education in many fields; however, we are able to gain it from a top college abroad instead. To take the aviation industry as an example（這個是我從twe完全手冊上抄的，這里好多怪怪的東西都是我囫圇吞棗弄出來的。大蝦的意見是保守點好還是多些花樣好？）, universities in China usually do few researches or fail to perform intensive studies in this area; in sharp contrast, some colleges in Canada cooperate with international aviation organizations such as IATA & ICAO（如果用全稱就很長了，整個句子的結(jié)構(gòu)會打亂阿...） and engage in a lot of researches in aviation. As a consequence, it is rather useful for some people to take a further study abroad.
Admittedly, it is arbitrary to judge the advantages of choosing a foreign university to study only according to the excuse I mentioned above. In fact, there is a more reasonable point to consider, that is, we will not only study in a foreign university, but also live in another country. To take the idea further, we can broaden our field of vision as well as (能不能連接動詞阿？) experience a distinctive life. For one thing, it is convenient for us to live, talk, study and travel with people from varieties of countries. In other words, we will have the chance to touch(謝謝！我一直想不出好詞) another culture, which may be a valuable experience for a youngster. Besides this, we are able to enjoy the beautiful scene which may be widely divergent from one country to another. In some sense, this kind of experience endows a person with cherishable fortune.
Beyond these obvious reasons, there lies a subtle cause that is usually ignored. Briefly speaking, the environment of a foreign university is similar to a small foreign society, where we can warm up for our career. Granted that if one has spent nearly most of his time in a mountain area, how shocked he would be when he was put into a modern society. Although it is an extreme instance, we can also image the difficulty an indigenous businessman might face when he works with his foreign partners. To be frank, it is not only an obstacle of language but also a huge gap between ideas and cultures. On that account, it seems crucial for somebody to understand foreigners and make himself understood by foreign people if his career is closely related with that country.
In a word, to study abroad has a clear edge on the opposite, which involves better education, divergent culture background and greater preparation for one’s career. Taking into account of all these factors, we may reach the conclusion that to study abroad is a wise choice.
修改意見:
Have you noticed the increasing number of people going to university aboard year by year? Those who have gotten advanced education in world-famous universities abroad are sharing their knowledge learned from foreign teachers with their native colleagues. To some extent, they have reached certain achievements in all kinds of areas. Generally speaking, when faced with the decision whether to study in a domestic university or receive advanced education abroad, every person has his standpoint and his specific reasons. As far as I am concerned, it is more considerable to study abroad. Afterwards, I will explain my opinions about it.
ETS的官方指導(dǎo)上說introductory要寫三部分，一開頭就要求是hook,我準備諺語是來不及了，就想用問句?？墒菍懗鰜砉止值模珠L又臭，可能還是不寫得好，跳過這一步。
the question is not really ask readers to anwser. the purpose is just to introduce the theme statement. but make sure the question is naturally related to your topic.
First and foremost, universities in my homeland could not provide us satisfactory advanced education in many fields; however, we are able to gain it from a top college abroad instead. To take the aviation industry as an example（這個是我從twe完全手冊上抄的，這里好多怪怪的東西都是我囫圇吞棗弄出來的。大蝦的意見是保守點好還是多些花樣好？）, universities in China usually do few researches or fail to perform intensive studies in this area; in sharp contrast, some colleges in Canada cooperate with international aviation organizations such as IATA & ICAO（如果用全稱就很長了，整個句子的結(jié)構(gòu)會打亂阿...）(but not all people can understand what they refer to) and engage in a lot of researches in aviation. As a consequence, it is rather useful for some people to take a further study abroad.
Admittedly, it is arbitrary to judge the advantages of choosing a foreign university to study only according to the excuse I mentioned above. In fact, there is a more reasonable point to consider, that is, we will not only study in a foreign university, but also live in another country. To take the idea further, we can broaden our field of vision as well as (能不能連接動詞阿？doing) experience a distinctive life. For one thing, it is convenient for us to live, talk, study and travel with people from varieties of countries. In other words, we will have the chance to touch(謝謝！我一直想不出好詞) another culture, which may be a valuable experience for a youngster. Besides this, we are able to enjoy the beautiful scene which may be widely divergent from one country to another. In some sense, this kind of experience endows a person with cherishable fortune.
Beyond these obvious reasons, there lies a subtle cause that is usually ignored. Briefly speaking, the environment of a foreign university is similar to a small foreign society, where we can warm up for our career. Granted that if one has spent nearly most of his time in a mountain area, how shocked he would be when he was put into a modern society. Although it is an extreme instance, we can also image the difficulty an indigenous businessman might face when he works with his foreign partners. To be frank, it is not only an obstacle of language but also a huge gap between ideas and cultures. On that account, it seems crucial for somebody to understand foreigners and make himself understood by foreign people if his career is closely related with that country.
In a word, to study abroad has a clear edge on the opposite, which involves better education, divergent culture background and greater preparation for one’s career. Taking into account of all these factors, we may reach the conclusion that to study abroad is a wise choice.
it is important to rewrite the essay after some feedback. another small tip: after you rewrite your essay, put it down and read it next day. mark the place where you changed. several times later, you will find that you overcome the mistake you ususally made.
Have you noticed the increasing number of people going to university aboard year by year? Those who have gotten advanced education in world-famous universities abroad are sharing their knowledge learned from foreign teachers with their native colleagues. To some extent, they have reached certain achievements in all kinds of areas. Generally speaking, when faced with the decision whether to study in a domestic university or receive advanced education abroad, every person has his standpoint and his specific reasons. As far as I am concerned, it is more considerable to study abroad. Afterwards, I will explain my opinions about it.
ETS的官方指導(dǎo)上說introductory要寫三部分，一開頭就要求是hook,我準備諺語是來不及了，就想用問句。可是寫出來怪怪的，又長又臭，可能還是不寫得好，跳過這一步。
First and foremost, universities in my homeland could not provide us satisfactory advanced education in many fields; however, we are able to gain it from a top college abroad instead. To take the aviation industry as an example（這個是我從twe完全手冊上抄的，這里好多怪怪的東西都是我囫圇吞棗弄出來的。大蝦的意見是保守點好還是多些花樣好？）, universities in China usually do few researches or fail to perform intensive studies in this area; in sharp contrast, some colleges in Canada cooperate with international aviation organizations such as IATA & ICAO（如果用全稱就很長了，整個句子的結(jié)構(gòu)會打亂阿...） and engage in a lot of researches in aviation. As a consequence, it is rather useful for some people to take a further study abroad.
Admittedly, it is arbitrary to judge the advantages of choosing a foreign university to study only according to the excuse I mentioned above. In fact, there is a more reasonable point to consider, that is, we will not only study in a foreign university, but also live in another country. To take the idea further, we can broaden our field of vision as well as (能不能連接動詞阿？) experience a distinctive life. For one thing, it is convenient for us to live, talk, study and travel with people from varieties of countries. In other words, we will have the chance to touch(謝謝！我一直想不出好詞) another culture, which may be a valuable experience for a youngster. Besides this, we are able to enjoy the beautiful scene which may be widely divergent from one country to another. In some sense, this kind of experience endows a person with cherishable fortune.
Beyond these obvious reasons, there lies a subtle cause that is usually ignored. Briefly speaking, the environment of a foreign university is similar to a small foreign society, where we can warm up for our career. Granted that if one has spent nearly most of his time in a mountain area, how shocked he would be when he was put into a modern society. Although it is an extreme instance, we can also image the difficulty an indigenous businessman might face when he works with his foreign partners. To be frank, it is not only an obstacle of language but also a huge gap between ideas and cultures. On that account, it seems crucial for somebody to understand foreigners and make himself understood by foreign people if his career is closely related with that country.
In a word, to study abroad has a clear edge on the opposite, which involves better education, divergent culture background and greater preparation for one’s career. Taking into account of all these factors, we may reach the conclusion that to study abroad is a wise choice.
修改意見:
Have you noticed the increasing number of people going to university aboard year by year? Those who have gotten advanced education in world-famous universities abroad are sharing their knowledge learned from foreign teachers with their native colleagues. To some extent, they have reached certain achievements in all kinds of areas. Generally speaking, when faced with the decision whether to study in a domestic university or receive advanced education abroad, every person has his standpoint and his specific reasons. As far as I am concerned, it is more considerable to study abroad. Afterwards, I will explain my opinions about it.
ETS的官方指導(dǎo)上說introductory要寫三部分，一開頭就要求是hook,我準備諺語是來不及了，就想用問句?？墒菍懗鰜砉止值模珠L又臭，可能還是不寫得好，跳過這一步。
the question is not really ask readers to anwser. the purpose is just to introduce the theme statement. but make sure the question is naturally related to your topic.
First and foremost, universities in my homeland could not provide us satisfactory advanced education in many fields; however, we are able to gain it from a top college abroad instead. To take the aviation industry as an example（這個是我從twe完全手冊上抄的，這里好多怪怪的東西都是我囫圇吞棗弄出來的。大蝦的意見是保守點好還是多些花樣好？）, universities in China usually do few researches or fail to perform intensive studies in this area; in sharp contrast, some colleges in Canada cooperate with international aviation organizations such as IATA & ICAO（如果用全稱就很長了，整個句子的結(jié)構(gòu)會打亂阿...）(but not all people can understand what they refer to) and engage in a lot of researches in aviation. As a consequence, it is rather useful for some people to take a further study abroad.
Admittedly, it is arbitrary to judge the advantages of choosing a foreign university to study only according to the excuse I mentioned above. In fact, there is a more reasonable point to consider, that is, we will not only study in a foreign university, but also live in another country. To take the idea further, we can broaden our field of vision as well as (能不能連接動詞阿？doing) experience a distinctive life. For one thing, it is convenient for us to live, talk, study and travel with people from varieties of countries. In other words, we will have the chance to touch(謝謝！我一直想不出好詞) another culture, which may be a valuable experience for a youngster. Besides this, we are able to enjoy the beautiful scene which may be widely divergent from one country to another. In some sense, this kind of experience endows a person with cherishable fortune.
Beyond these obvious reasons, there lies a subtle cause that is usually ignored. Briefly speaking, the environment of a foreign university is similar to a small foreign society, where we can warm up for our career. Granted that if one has spent nearly most of his time in a mountain area, how shocked he would be when he was put into a modern society. Although it is an extreme instance, we can also image the difficulty an indigenous businessman might face when he works with his foreign partners. To be frank, it is not only an obstacle of language but also a huge gap between ideas and cultures. On that account, it seems crucial for somebody to understand foreigners and make himself understood by foreign people if his career is closely related with that country.
In a word, to study abroad has a clear edge on the opposite, which involves better education, divergent culture background and greater preparation for one’s career. Taking into account of all these factors, we may reach the conclusion that to study abroad is a wise choice.
it is important to rewrite the essay after some feedback. another small tip: after you rewrite your essay, put it down and read it next day. mark the place where you changed. several times later, you will find that you overcome the mistake you ususally made.