網(wǎng)友作文二：
From: P.Jones
To: all the staff來源：www.examda.com
Date: 9/21/2008
Subject: the company name
As our company has just merged with a compatitor[1] to become MasonGolding.We decieded to [2]start using the new name next week[3].Please using[4] the new name next week.If you have any promble,you can come to my office.[5]
Thank you!
_________________________________________
[1]這個就不要提了吧，并購成了一家人，沒必要在公司內(nèi)部的memo中有意提醒。
[2]既然并購就意味著要換公司的名字，怎么是we decide?在商務(wù)英語的寫作中，主語一般都選擇客體代詞，避免應(yīng)用主觀性很強的句子。
[3]沒有具體日期，你讓員工們從什么時候開始用這個新名字？
[4]Use
[5]去掉，這句話是用在信件結(jié)尾的，而且，也不能說come to my office. 公司并購，換新名稱，理所應(yīng)當?shù)?，去你的辦公室做什么？
網(wǎng)友作文三：
From: Office manager
To: All staff
Date: September 20, 2008
Our company has merged with Mason. co recently. [1]The new name " MasonGolding" will take effect on October 1st. Please use the new name in your daily affairs[2] from then on. Thanks for your cooperation.
_________________________________________
[1]開頭這句改為分詞，following the merger, ....
[2]改為：routine work 或者其他可以表示日常工作的，affairs 一般是指報紙的一周大事記，或者個人事，比如：love affairs 就是桃色事件，第三者插足。
網(wǎng)友作文四：
Memo
From:Sonia
To:All staff來源：考試大
Date:29 september 2008
Re:The changed[1] name of our company
As our company has merged with one of our competiter,[2]the name of our company has changed[3] into MasonGolding. All the staff should use our new name since 1 October, and we can only use the new name after that day
If you have any question, please connect us. [4]
Thank you!考試大(www．Examda。com)
_________________________________________
[1]過去分詞作定語或狀語都是表示已經(jīng)結(jié)束的動作，如果名字已經(jīng)改完，就不用有這封memo 了。
[2]改為介詞短語after the merger,
[3]時態(tài)錯誤，完成時表示已經(jīng)了，應(yīng)該是將來時。
[4]去掉，名字問題毋庸置疑，沒有商量。
網(wǎng)友作文五：
As the director board agreed to move toward a merger between our company and Mason, [1] the name of company will be changed. The new name MasonGolding become effective from next month[2].Please be noticed.
_________________________________________
[1]好羅嗦的原因啊，董事會的決定你就不用提了。
[2]太長的時間，也太不具體
From: P.Jones
To: all the staff來源：www.examda.com
Date: 9/21/2008
Subject: the company name
As our company has just merged with a compatitor[1] to become MasonGolding.We decieded to [2]start using the new name next week[3].Please using[4] the new name next week.If you have any promble,you can come to my office.[5]
Thank you!
_________________________________________
[1]這個就不要提了吧，并購成了一家人，沒必要在公司內(nèi)部的memo中有意提醒。
[2]既然并購就意味著要換公司的名字，怎么是we decide?在商務(wù)英語的寫作中，主語一般都選擇客體代詞，避免應(yīng)用主觀性很強的句子。
[3]沒有具體日期，你讓員工們從什么時候開始用這個新名字？
[4]Use
[5]去掉，這句話是用在信件結(jié)尾的，而且，也不能說come to my office. 公司并購，換新名稱，理所應(yīng)當?shù)?，去你的辦公室做什么？
網(wǎng)友作文三：
From: Office manager
To: All staff
Date: September 20, 2008
Our company has merged with Mason. co recently. [1]The new name " MasonGolding" will take effect on October 1st. Please use the new name in your daily affairs[2] from then on. Thanks for your cooperation.
_________________________________________
[1]開頭這句改為分詞，following the merger, ....
[2]改為：routine work 或者其他可以表示日常工作的，affairs 一般是指報紙的一周大事記，或者個人事，比如：love affairs 就是桃色事件，第三者插足。
網(wǎng)友作文四：
Memo
From:Sonia
To:All staff來源：考試大
Date:29 september 2008
Re:The changed[1] name of our company
As our company has merged with one of our competiter,[2]the name of our company has changed[3] into MasonGolding. All the staff should use our new name since 1 October, and we can only use the new name after that day
If you have any question, please connect us. [4]
Thank you!考試大(www．Examda。com)
_________________________________________
[1]過去分詞作定語或狀語都是表示已經(jīng)結(jié)束的動作，如果名字已經(jīng)改完，就不用有這封memo 了。
[2]改為介詞短語after the merger,
[3]時態(tài)錯誤，完成時表示已經(jīng)了，應(yīng)該是將來時。
[4]去掉，名字問題毋庸置疑，沒有商量。
網(wǎng)友作文五：
As the director board agreed to move toward a merger between our company and Mason, [1] the name of company will be changed. The new name MasonGolding become effective from next month[2].Please be noticed.
_________________________________________
[1]好羅嗦的原因啊，董事會的決定你就不用提了。
[2]太長的時間，也太不具體