好像以前在這里看到一篇被ETS評過分的ISSUE,是一個考友寫的，花了10$,打的是3分,我回去好好看了一下,發(fā)現(xiàn)確實有一些嚴(yán)重的問題,現(xiàn)在再把他貼出來讓大家一起來學(xué)習(xí)討論.
Present your perspective on the issue below, using relevant reasons and/or examples to support your views. "It is important for higher education to challenge established traditions and values."
What is the purpose of higher education? One important purpose for education is to challenge established traditions and values. I agree with this point. The challenge of established traditions and values will cultivate the students' good characters of creation, and could eliminate some falty values through various of values.
First,the main purpose of education is not only teach students the existing knowledge and the old traditional values ,but to teach them the creation,to break the old. This is one of the most important characters in one's life.Creative is needed in most of the fields in the society. Traditions, that we may see that some of them have been out of date these days, should be changed. In the college and university, students could air their opinion in an free atmosphere, only through this could students form a habit of critical thinking, and the character of creation will be formed during the discussion of their points of view. Therefore,it is very important for higher education to challenge established traditions.
Second,the traditions and the values which have been established seems falty in some cases,and college is a place where these falty values could be challenged.The traditional value system,which are formed over hundreds of years, some of them could not be suit to the society nowadays. These value system should be changed. The renewal of the value system could do good not only to the society nowadays,but the development of the society. As it was said above,the college is a place where students could present different opinions and different value systems. In the process of higher education, students could learn different and controversial values systems that maybe different from himself, even some new values that are in controversy with the value that are existed. Through choosing them,they could make a better view point ,both advantage and disvantage, and could formed there own value that are best fit for them.
However,it should be admitted that higher education should follow the traditions and the values that could benefit our society nowadays. Most of the traditions,with hundreds of years' deposition,however,could still help students to adopt the accurate knowledge, and the proper value syetem. Students should form some of the good traditional values,such as honesty , confidence, enthuiastic and humility. These good values should not be challenged and should not be changed. Only those value that are out-of- date to the nowadays society should be challenged.
To sum up, Challenging established traditions and values is an important aspect for higher education.Through this, students could be more creative, and could form a sound value system that fits for them and the society nowadays. However, the traditions and the value systems that are still be useful in forming a right knowledge and a value system should not be chanllenged and students still have to learn from them.
我認(rèn)為撇開句子問題，這篇文章一個最典型的問題就在于通篇都看似在講道理，仔細(xì)一讀就會發(fā)現(xiàn)實則是通篇講空話，說夸張一點(diǎn)就是那種口號式的:“我們應(yīng)該…..我們要…..我們只有這樣做才能……”中間的幾個段落中幾乎沒有能支持其觀點(diǎn)的東西，講了一些沒用的空話。
下面是我臨時作的一個類比:
假設(shè)回答這樣一個問題：“我們是否應(yīng)該廢除資本主義制度”
我模仿這篇作文的口吻他的結(jié)構(gòu)就是如下：
1.是的，應(yīng)該。
2.因為我們應(yīng)該走社會主義，所以資本主義不好，過時了。(沒有理由)
3.因為資本主義實行很長了，有弊端，所以我們應(yīng)該改，即使在路上會有各種情況我們可以長經(jīng)驗。(沒有理由)
4.當(dāng)然，資本主義的好東西也要保留，我們改的是那些應(yīng)該改的。(空話,廢話)
5.所以，資本主義應(yīng)該廢除，只有這樣我們才能……但是有的好的也不要廢除
是不是有這種感覺:論證極度無力！
Present your perspective on the issue below, using relevant reasons and/or examples to support your views. "It is important for higher education to challenge established traditions and values."
What is the purpose of higher education? One important purpose for education is to challenge established traditions and values. I agree with this point. The challenge of established traditions and values will cultivate the students' good characters of creation, and could eliminate some falty values through various of values.
First,the main purpose of education is not only teach students the existing knowledge and the old traditional values ,but to teach them the creation,to break the old. This is one of the most important characters in one's life.Creative is needed in most of the fields in the society. Traditions, that we may see that some of them have been out of date these days, should be changed. In the college and university, students could air their opinion in an free atmosphere, only through this could students form a habit of critical thinking, and the character of creation will be formed during the discussion of their points of view. Therefore,it is very important for higher education to challenge established traditions.
Second,the traditions and the values which have been established seems falty in some cases,and college is a place where these falty values could be challenged.The traditional value system,which are formed over hundreds of years, some of them could not be suit to the society nowadays. These value system should be changed. The renewal of the value system could do good not only to the society nowadays,but the development of the society. As it was said above,the college is a place where students could present different opinions and different value systems. In the process of higher education, students could learn different and controversial values systems that maybe different from himself, even some new values that are in controversy with the value that are existed. Through choosing them,they could make a better view point ,both advantage and disvantage, and could formed there own value that are best fit for them.
However,it should be admitted that higher education should follow the traditions and the values that could benefit our society nowadays. Most of the traditions,with hundreds of years' deposition,however,could still help students to adopt the accurate knowledge, and the proper value syetem. Students should form some of the good traditional values,such as honesty , confidence, enthuiastic and humility. These good values should not be challenged and should not be changed. Only those value that are out-of- date to the nowadays society should be challenged.
To sum up, Challenging established traditions and values is an important aspect for higher education.Through this, students could be more creative, and could form a sound value system that fits for them and the society nowadays. However, the traditions and the value systems that are still be useful in forming a right knowledge and a value system should not be chanllenged and students still have to learn from them.
我認(rèn)為撇開句子問題，這篇文章一個最典型的問題就在于通篇都看似在講道理，仔細(xì)一讀就會發(fā)現(xiàn)實則是通篇講空話，說夸張一點(diǎn)就是那種口號式的:“我們應(yīng)該…..我們要…..我們只有這樣做才能……”中間的幾個段落中幾乎沒有能支持其觀點(diǎn)的東西，講了一些沒用的空話。
下面是我臨時作的一個類比:
假設(shè)回答這樣一個問題：“我們是否應(yīng)該廢除資本主義制度”
我模仿這篇作文的口吻他的結(jié)構(gòu)就是如下：
1.是的，應(yīng)該。
2.因為我們應(yīng)該走社會主義，所以資本主義不好，過時了。(沒有理由)
3.因為資本主義實行很長了，有弊端，所以我們應(yīng)該改，即使在路上會有各種情況我們可以長經(jīng)驗。(沒有理由)
4.當(dāng)然，資本主義的好東西也要保留，我們改的是那些應(yīng)該改的。(空話,廢話)
5.所以，資本主義應(yīng)該廢除，只有這樣我們才能……但是有的好的也不要廢除
是不是有這種感覺:論證極度無力！