I don't believe in ghosts. But I often heard people， especially old people， talk about ghosts. It is said that ghosts often appear at night.
One night when I was ten years old， I had a long walk with my grandmother along a river. The weather was not so fine. There were few stars in the sky and a quiet moon was going through the black clouds.
Just then the moon was wholly covered by the clouds and it was pitch-dark all around. Suddenly， my grandmother put her arms around me， picked me up and began to run as fast as she could.
Only when she was quite out of breath， did she put me down. Shocked by her action， I asked her what had happened. She looked behind nervously， and said positively， “Just now， I … I saw a ghost sitting on the river bank， who [. [It] （1） had bright blue eyes， a big mouth， and long white hair. If I didn't take [hadn't taken] （2） you and ran [run] （3） so fast， you and I would have been taken away by the ghost.”
The next morning， I went back home from the [a] （4） relative I had visited， along the same river bank. Again I saw the “ghost” —— a pile of earth， with some dry grain grass on top of it. Remembering what had happened the night before， I laughed heartily.
Obviously， ghosts don't exist in reality but only in people's fancy！
江蘇省徐州柳新礦校 蘇德宏
評 語
全文簡潔生動，氣氛渲染較為成功，最后的結(jié)論也很有說服力。文章中某些語言上的不足之處點(diǎn)評修改如下：
（1）這是grandmother說的話，屬口語體，況且為了強(qiáng)調(diào)ghost的外貌，用who引導(dǎo)的定語從句不夠好，不如用It作主語另起一句。
（2）、（3）這里表示與過去相反的事實(shí)，If從句要用過去完成時。
（4）relative是第一次提到，不能用定冠詞the.
One night when I was ten years old， I had a long walk with my grandmother along a river. The weather was not so fine. There were few stars in the sky and a quiet moon was going through the black clouds.
Just then the moon was wholly covered by the clouds and it was pitch-dark all around. Suddenly， my grandmother put her arms around me， picked me up and began to run as fast as she could.
Only when she was quite out of breath， did she put me down. Shocked by her action， I asked her what had happened. She looked behind nervously， and said positively， “Just now， I … I saw a ghost sitting on the river bank， who [. [It] （1） had bright blue eyes， a big mouth， and long white hair. If I didn't take [hadn't taken] （2） you and ran [run] （3） so fast， you and I would have been taken away by the ghost.”
The next morning， I went back home from the [a] （4） relative I had visited， along the same river bank. Again I saw the “ghost” —— a pile of earth， with some dry grain grass on top of it. Remembering what had happened the night before， I laughed heartily.
Obviously， ghosts don't exist in reality but only in people's fancy！
江蘇省徐州柳新礦校 蘇德宏
評 語
全文簡潔生動，氣氛渲染較為成功，最后的結(jié)論也很有說服力。文章中某些語言上的不足之處點(diǎn)評修改如下：
（1）這是grandmother說的話，屬口語體，況且為了強(qiáng)調(diào)ghost的外貌，用who引導(dǎo)的定語從句不夠好，不如用It作主語另起一句。
（2）、（3）這里表示與過去相反的事實(shí)，If從句要用過去完成時。
（4）relative是第一次提到，不能用定冠詞the.