If we make the right choice of books， reading can offer us the greatest pleasure.
There are many kinds of books. Books on history， philosophy（哲學(xué)），travel and science should have their place in our bookshelf [on our bookshelves]（1）。Sometimes reading them is very dull， but they really do us good.For[，for]（2） they give us education and make us substantial（富裕殷實(shí)）in content （內(nèi)容）。
Books on literature（文學(xué)） are mostly fascinating（迷人的）。When we get tired，it is healthy to read some novels by a great writer [great writers]（3）。 Someone says that reading a good book is equal to talking with a great man.
Many of us students love to read romantic and violence books [books of romance and violence]（4）。This kind of books is simply for amusement and fun. Some students spend a lot of time reading these books. They even read them in class and fail to finish their homework. I think it is very harmful.
Time is limited but knowledge is boundless（無(wú)限的）。 A student should know how to make full use of his time and store up his knowledge. Reading too many common books is wasting time. We should develop a taste for serious reading， which will give us more pleasure than reading popular books.
上海市向明中學(xué) 顧蔚
評(píng) 語(yǔ)
這篇議論文內(nèi)容短小精練，行文工整清秀，令人想起英國(guó)哲學(xué)家、語(yǔ)言大師弗朗西斯·培根（Francis Bacon）的散文。雖然兩者之間的差距是不言而喻的，但顧蔚同學(xué)這篇文章的構(gòu)思、行文、語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用確實(shí)不錯(cuò)。文中某些語(yǔ)言上的不足之處點(diǎn)評(píng)修改如下：
（1）bookshelf前介詞一般用on；另外，前面用our作定語(yǔ)，bookshelf還是用復(fù)數(shù)為好。
（2）這里for表示附加說(shuō)明的原因，是并列連接詞，一般與前文用逗號(hào)分開。
（3）前文為some novels，后面用復(fù)數(shù) writers較自然。
（4）romantic是形容詞，violence是名詞，并列修飾一個(gè)名詞，從修辭上說(shuō)不好，故改之。
There are many kinds of books. Books on history， philosophy（哲學(xué)），travel and science should have their place in our bookshelf [on our bookshelves]（1）。Sometimes reading them is very dull， but they really do us good.For[，for]（2） they give us education and make us substantial（富裕殷實(shí)）in content （內(nèi)容）。
Books on literature（文學(xué)） are mostly fascinating（迷人的）。When we get tired，it is healthy to read some novels by a great writer [great writers]（3）。 Someone says that reading a good book is equal to talking with a great man.
Many of us students love to read romantic and violence books [books of romance and violence]（4）。This kind of books is simply for amusement and fun. Some students spend a lot of time reading these books. They even read them in class and fail to finish their homework. I think it is very harmful.
Time is limited but knowledge is boundless（無(wú)限的）。 A student should know how to make full use of his time and store up his knowledge. Reading too many common books is wasting time. We should develop a taste for serious reading， which will give us more pleasure than reading popular books.
上海市向明中學(xué) 顧蔚
評(píng) 語(yǔ)
這篇議論文內(nèi)容短小精練，行文工整清秀，令人想起英國(guó)哲學(xué)家、語(yǔ)言大師弗朗西斯·培根（Francis Bacon）的散文。雖然兩者之間的差距是不言而喻的，但顧蔚同學(xué)這篇文章的構(gòu)思、行文、語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用確實(shí)不錯(cuò)。文中某些語(yǔ)言上的不足之處點(diǎn)評(píng)修改如下：
（1）bookshelf前介詞一般用on；另外，前面用our作定語(yǔ)，bookshelf還是用復(fù)數(shù)為好。
（2）這里for表示附加說(shuō)明的原因，是并列連接詞，一般與前文用逗號(hào)分開。
（3）前文為some novels，后面用復(fù)數(shù) writers較自然。
（4）romantic是形容詞，violence是名詞，并列修飾一個(gè)名詞，從修辭上說(shuō)不好，故改之。