"Children over 15 should be allowed to make decisions about their lives without the interference of their parents or teachers. "Some people would say nowadays. Moreover， some even argue that "society should adjust their laws accordingly". Yet in my view， instead of accepting that children mature at a younger age these days， they shouldn't be considered "mature" until 18 years old， or older， in some cases.
In the first place， maturity doesn't just mean physically growing up， but mentally as well. A lot of facts show that a 15 year old child can not think thoroughly or maturely in case he isn't sheltered under the care of his parents or teachers. The number of young smokers is increasing in our society because they lack care of their families. In addition， young woman's pregnancy out of wedlock now has made its entrance to our society， and the number is increasing， too. Some of these pregnant women are even under 18 years old. Make that parents and teachers "interfered" and offered them with pieces of good advice. It stands good chance that these incidents will decrease.
Secondly， since children at this age have devoted most of their years to education （staying at school and attending classcs）， these children don't really have much time to be in the society. And the lack of experience misleads them to believing others easily. In other words， a 15 year old child does not yet possess the ability to protect himself. A piece of disastrous news came up recently， a 16 year-old boy took a man who asked him way to the place the man mentioned and got robbed and then，killed. How can children make decisions about their lives when they can not protect themselves？ They need advice from their parents and teachers.
Finally， I would like to say that actually nobody on the earth can make a decision without any other people's influence，parents and teachers.
Finally， I would like to say that actually nobody on the earth can make a decision without any other people's influence，not even Mr. President. More or less， one bears other people's perspectives in mind. Not to mention children who need more advice and so called "interference".
It is true that some children， 15 years old， can think by themselves， make decisions on their own and do things right.They mature at this young age because they live in a special environment， namely they are forced to face the pressure of society at a rather early age， or their family activities involve quite a lot social communications. However， for nearly all the 15 year-old children in our society， they are not ready to make their own decisions about lives. If we give them the right to do whatever they want to do too early， there will be more regrets for us.
簡(jiǎn) 評(píng)
本文作者反對(duì)讓青少年獨(dú)立作決定。文章中心明確，論證全面。主體部分用兩段話結(jié)合各種社會(huì)現(xiàn)實(shí)問題，說明青少年缺乏社會(huì)經(jīng)驗(yàn)，需要家庭和學(xué)校的教育。例證豐富，內(nèi)容詳實(shí)，頗具說服力。欠缺之處在于兩段論據(jù)的側(cè)重點(diǎn)應(yīng)更分明些。并且，不獨(dú)立作決定是否等于事事依賴父母呢？如果文章結(jié)尾能區(qū)別這兩個(gè)概念，則觀點(diǎn)會(huì)更站得住腳。
文章句子簡(jiǎn)潔連貫，語言概括性強(qiáng)，如"a 16-year-old boy took a man who asked him way tO the place the man mentioned and got robbed and then，killed''的舉例就是非常精煉的表達(dá)。這樣的文風(fēng)值得提倡。
In the first place， maturity doesn't just mean physically growing up， but mentally as well. A lot of facts show that a 15 year old child can not think thoroughly or maturely in case he isn't sheltered under the care of his parents or teachers. The number of young smokers is increasing in our society because they lack care of their families. In addition， young woman's pregnancy out of wedlock now has made its entrance to our society， and the number is increasing， too. Some of these pregnant women are even under 18 years old. Make that parents and teachers "interfered" and offered them with pieces of good advice. It stands good chance that these incidents will decrease.
Secondly， since children at this age have devoted most of their years to education （staying at school and attending classcs）， these children don't really have much time to be in the society. And the lack of experience misleads them to believing others easily. In other words， a 15 year old child does not yet possess the ability to protect himself. A piece of disastrous news came up recently， a 16 year-old boy took a man who asked him way to the place the man mentioned and got robbed and then，killed. How can children make decisions about their lives when they can not protect themselves？ They need advice from their parents and teachers.
Finally， I would like to say that actually nobody on the earth can make a decision without any other people's influence，parents and teachers.
Finally， I would like to say that actually nobody on the earth can make a decision without any other people's influence，not even Mr. President. More or less， one bears other people's perspectives in mind. Not to mention children who need more advice and so called "interference".
It is true that some children， 15 years old， can think by themselves， make decisions on their own and do things right.They mature at this young age because they live in a special environment， namely they are forced to face the pressure of society at a rather early age， or their family activities involve quite a lot social communications. However， for nearly all the 15 year-old children in our society， they are not ready to make their own decisions about lives. If we give them the right to do whatever they want to do too early， there will be more regrets for us.
簡(jiǎn) 評(píng)
本文作者反對(duì)讓青少年獨(dú)立作決定。文章中心明確，論證全面。主體部分用兩段話結(jié)合各種社會(huì)現(xiàn)實(shí)問題，說明青少年缺乏社會(huì)經(jīng)驗(yàn)，需要家庭和學(xué)校的教育。例證豐富，內(nèi)容詳實(shí)，頗具說服力。欠缺之處在于兩段論據(jù)的側(cè)重點(diǎn)應(yīng)更分明些。并且，不獨(dú)立作決定是否等于事事依賴父母呢？如果文章結(jié)尾能區(qū)別這兩個(gè)概念，則觀點(diǎn)會(huì)更站得住腳。
文章句子簡(jiǎn)潔連貫，語言概括性強(qiáng)，如"a 16-year-old boy took a man who asked him way tO the place the man mentioned and got robbed and then，killed''的舉例就是非常精煉的表達(dá)。這樣的文風(fēng)值得提倡。