分析型作文之14分作文
一、 常見(jiàn)寫(xiě)作錯(cuò)誤 ：斷句錯(cuò)誤、垂懸成分（指非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)時(shí)，其邏輯主語(yǔ)必須與句子的主語(yǔ)保持一致）
二、詞匯應(yīng)用：在英語(yǔ)習(xí)作中，為了減少動(dòng)詞的使用頻率，除了使用非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞外，還有幾種有效方法
1、介詞：介詞在英語(yǔ)中非?；钴S，很多漢語(yǔ)需用動(dòng)詞的地方在英語(yǔ)里都可以用上介詞或介詞詞組
2、抽象名詞的使用：很多抽象名詞包含動(dòng)態(tài)意義，如：laughter,work,permission,protection 等等，正是這個(gè)特點(diǎn)，讓抽象名詞成為動(dòng)詞的替代品
3、 形容詞的動(dòng)態(tài)含義：利用形容詞的動(dòng)態(tài)含義來(lái)減少動(dòng)詞使用頻率
三、 修辭手法(要善于利用修辭手法)
1、同成分重復(fù)
2、同義重復(fù)
練習(xí)：（以下為一篇11分范文，請(qǐng)練習(xí)按要求改寫(xiě)成漂亮的14分作文）
There is a trend of globalization ,English becomes a vital tool for effective communication.College students now concern more about how to improve their English. Students' secrets are as follows.
要求：
1、糾正第一句蘭色粗體句中的斷句錯(cuò)誤
2、用抽象名詞代替improve , 以減少動(dòng)詞的使用頻率
As we know,"Practice makes perfect" . Some students try to study diligently and they really make progress in english . Others turn to entertainment for help,they watch English movies and make an all-out effort to learn english songs. Still others who like making friends, make regular appointments with their foreign friends for a chat . a dinner or a party.
要求：
1、藍(lán)色粗體句中有三個(gè)動(dòng)詞，試只用"contribute to" 一個(gè)動(dòng)詞詞組，以減少動(dòng)詞的使用
2、糾正紅色粗體句中的斷句錯(cuò)誤，并把后半句改為非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞結(jié)構(gòu)，以減少動(dòng)詞使用頻率；
3、用形容詞"sociable"代替綠色句中的定語(yǔ)從句
As for me , I prefer the third way. Two ingredients could account for my choice. It is primarily becaouse there is no better way to learn idiomatic english than communicating with native english speakers. Moreover, it is owing to my sociable personality , liking making different kinds of friends.
要求：糾正藍(lán)色句中的垂懸問(wèn)題，使用"sociable"的同義詞"friendly"結(jié)合兩個(gè)形容詞構(gòu)成同義重復(fù)
參考答案：
With the trend of globalization,English becomes a vital tool for effective communication.College students now concern more about the improvement of their English. Students' secrets are as follows.
As we know,"Practice makes perfect" . Diligent study contributes to some students' progress in english . Others turn to entertainment for help, watching English movies and makeing an all-out effort to learn english songs. Still some sociable students make regular appointments with their foreign friends for a chat . a dinner or a party.
As for me , I prefer the third way. Two ingredients could account for my choice. It is primarily becaouse there is no better way to learn idiomatic english than communicating with native english speakers. Moreover, it is owing to my sociable and friendly personality , that is, I like making different kinds of friends.
一、 常見(jiàn)寫(xiě)作錯(cuò)誤 ：斷句錯(cuò)誤、垂懸成分（指非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)時(shí)，其邏輯主語(yǔ)必須與句子的主語(yǔ)保持一致）
二、詞匯應(yīng)用：在英語(yǔ)習(xí)作中，為了減少動(dòng)詞的使用頻率，除了使用非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞外，還有幾種有效方法
1、介詞：介詞在英語(yǔ)中非?；钴S，很多漢語(yǔ)需用動(dòng)詞的地方在英語(yǔ)里都可以用上介詞或介詞詞組
2、抽象名詞的使用：很多抽象名詞包含動(dòng)態(tài)意義，如：laughter,work,permission,protection 等等，正是這個(gè)特點(diǎn)，讓抽象名詞成為動(dòng)詞的替代品
3、 形容詞的動(dòng)態(tài)含義：利用形容詞的動(dòng)態(tài)含義來(lái)減少動(dòng)詞使用頻率
三、 修辭手法(要善于利用修辭手法)
1、同成分重復(fù)
2、同義重復(fù)
練習(xí)：（以下為一篇11分范文，請(qǐng)練習(xí)按要求改寫(xiě)成漂亮的14分作文）
There is a trend of globalization ,English becomes a vital tool for effective communication.College students now concern more about how to improve their English. Students' secrets are as follows.
要求：
1、糾正第一句蘭色粗體句中的斷句錯(cuò)誤
2、用抽象名詞代替improve , 以減少動(dòng)詞的使用頻率
As we know,"Practice makes perfect" . Some students try to study diligently and they really make progress in english . Others turn to entertainment for help,they watch English movies and make an all-out effort to learn english songs. Still others who like making friends, make regular appointments with their foreign friends for a chat . a dinner or a party.
要求：
1、藍(lán)色粗體句中有三個(gè)動(dòng)詞，試只用"contribute to" 一個(gè)動(dòng)詞詞組，以減少動(dòng)詞的使用
2、糾正紅色粗體句中的斷句錯(cuò)誤，并把后半句改為非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞結(jié)構(gòu)，以減少動(dòng)詞使用頻率；
3、用形容詞"sociable"代替綠色句中的定語(yǔ)從句
As for me , I prefer the third way. Two ingredients could account for my choice. It is primarily becaouse there is no better way to learn idiomatic english than communicating with native english speakers. Moreover, it is owing to my sociable personality , liking making different kinds of friends.
要求：糾正藍(lán)色句中的垂懸問(wèn)題，使用"sociable"的同義詞"friendly"結(jié)合兩個(gè)形容詞構(gòu)成同義重復(fù)
參考答案：
With the trend of globalization,English becomes a vital tool for effective communication.College students now concern more about the improvement of their English. Students' secrets are as follows.
As we know,"Practice makes perfect" . Diligent study contributes to some students' progress in english . Others turn to entertainment for help, watching English movies and makeing an all-out effort to learn english songs. Still some sociable students make regular appointments with their foreign friends for a chat . a dinner or a party.
As for me , I prefer the third way. Two ingredients could account for my choice. It is primarily becaouse there is no better way to learn idiomatic english than communicating with native english speakers. Moreover, it is owing to my sociable and friendly personality , that is, I like making different kinds of friends.