Last summer two foreigners came to my grandmother's home. They are [were] （1） Mr. and Mrs. Reoge. They were from America. The place where my grandparents are now living in [living] （2） was the very house they used to spend their childhoods [in] （3）。 Their coming [arrival] （4） was a big surprise to me. I talked with them in that I can [so that I could] （5） practise my spoken English. Suddenly， Mr. Reoge said to me：“Your English is very good！” Mr. Reoge， a real native speaker， praised my English！ I couldn't help smiling， but I heard myself said [saying ] （6） ， “No， no！” Almost immediately I realized what kind of a mistake I had made. It's the difference between western and eastern cultures. [In the west you are not supposed to say “no” ， while nodding your head with a smile. ]（7）
I still remember clearly how in a strange way Mr. Reoge looked at me while I was smiling with happiness， but saying， “no”。 He was confused！
Though I've learnt a lot of cultural differences between Eastand West from books， it is the first time that I am strongly impressed by it[have ever been deeply impressed by them in real life]. （8）
復(fù)旦大學(xué)附中高三（5）王蕾
評(píng) 語(yǔ)
作者能在這么短的篇幅內(nèi)表達(dá)一個(gè)較深刻的主題是很不容易的。全文用詞和文章構(gòu)架也較為老練，并能較好地運(yùn)用對(duì)話展開敘述。文章中某些語(yǔ)言上的不足之處點(diǎn)評(píng)修改如下：
（1）時(shí)態(tài)用錯(cuò)了。
（2）、（3） Where從句中 living in后面的介詞 in應(yīng)該去掉。因?yàn)閺木涞倪B接詞where是連接副詞，在從句中作狀語(yǔ)。而“they used to spend their childhoods”這句話后面要加上介詞in.因?yàn)檫@句話在這里作 houses 的后置定語(yǔ)，省掉了連接代詞which 或that，請(qǐng)比較下列兩句話：
This is the house （which）I lived in two years ago.
This is the house where （=in which） I lived two years ago.
（4）用 arrival 較好。
（5）這里連接詞和時(shí)態(tài)都用錯(cuò)了。
（6）這里要用現(xiàn)在分詞。
（7）作者似乎沒能把意思表達(dá)徹底，故加上方括號(hào)內(nèi)這句話，使意思更明了。
（8）It is the first time that從句中，一般要用現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)。
I still remember clearly how in a strange way Mr. Reoge looked at me while I was smiling with happiness， but saying， “no”。 He was confused！
Though I've learnt a lot of cultural differences between Eastand West from books， it is the first time that I am strongly impressed by it[have ever been deeply impressed by them in real life]. （8）
復(fù)旦大學(xué)附中高三（5）王蕾
評(píng) 語(yǔ)
作者能在這么短的篇幅內(nèi)表達(dá)一個(gè)較深刻的主題是很不容易的。全文用詞和文章構(gòu)架也較為老練，并能較好地運(yùn)用對(duì)話展開敘述。文章中某些語(yǔ)言上的不足之處點(diǎn)評(píng)修改如下：
（1）時(shí)態(tài)用錯(cuò)了。
（2）、（3） Where從句中 living in后面的介詞 in應(yīng)該去掉。因?yàn)閺木涞倪B接詞where是連接副詞，在從句中作狀語(yǔ)。而“they used to spend their childhoods”這句話后面要加上介詞in.因?yàn)檫@句話在這里作 houses 的后置定語(yǔ)，省掉了連接代詞which 或that，請(qǐng)比較下列兩句話：
This is the house （which）I lived in two years ago.
This is the house where （=in which） I lived two years ago.
（4）用 arrival 較好。
（5）這里連接詞和時(shí)態(tài)都用錯(cuò)了。
（6）這里要用現(xiàn)在分詞。
（7）作者似乎沒能把意思表達(dá)徹底，故加上方括號(hào)內(nèi)這句話，使意思更明了。
（8）It is the first time that從句中，一般要用現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)。