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習(xí)作評(píng)析（9）之二
elephants have a big nose and big ears and they are kind to humans. We can also see big and little monkeys running and dancing， just like happy children. Pandas， with good manners， are very friendly and polite to visitors. We will certainly have a good time there.
習(xí)作評(píng)析
習(xí)作題目
《學(xué)英語(yǔ)》報(bào)擬在某期頭版介紹英國(guó)語(yǔ)言專(zhuān)家 W . J . Waston， 請(qǐng)你就下面的簡(jiǎn)歷寫(xiě)一篇介紹性的短文（詞數(shù) 100 左右）
姓名： W . J . Waston 性別：男
國(guó)籍：英國(guó)
出生年月： 1967 年 6 月
職業(yè)：英語(yǔ)教師
工作單位：第一中學(xué)
簡(jiǎn)歷： 1989 年大學(xué)畢業(yè)， 1992 年攜妻子來(lái)到中國(guó)。
主要事跡： 1. 熱愛(ài)教育事業(yè)，工作認(rèn)真負(fù)責(zé)，樂(lè)于幫助學(xué)生。
2. 教學(xué)方法多樣，課堂生動(dòng)有趣，深受學(xué)生歡迎。
3. 經(jīng)常為中學(xué)生作如何學(xué)好英語(yǔ)的報(bào)告。
4. 任本報(bào)顧問(wèn)，提出了許多良好的建議。
生詞：畢業(yè) graduate ；顧問(wèn) adviser ；建議 advice
學(xué)生原文
W . J . Waston was British ① . He was born in England in June， 1967. He was graduated from a university in 1989 ② ， and then came to China with his wife in 1992. Now he is working in No. 1 Middle School as an English teacher.
He loves teaching， and is strict with his work ③ . He is always ready to help his students. He had ④ a strange way of making his classes lively and interesting， so he is very liked by his students ⑤ . He often reports to middle school students on how to learn English well ⑥ .
Now he is an adviser to our paper， and he offered a lot of good advices ⑦ . Under ⑧ his help we are doing better in our work.
名師點(diǎn)評(píng)
本篇習(xí)作要點(diǎn)齊全，語(yǔ)言精練，層次分明，基本上完成了寫(xiě)作任務(wù)。但考生在動(dòng)詞的運(yùn)用上應(yīng)多下功夫，要重視英語(yǔ)的習(xí)慣用語(yǔ)。
① British 前加 a .
②去掉 was .
③ with 改為 in， be strict with sb 表示對(duì)人格； be strict in 表示對(duì)工作認(rèn)真。
④ had 改為 has .
⑤本句是典型的漢式英語(yǔ)，最好改為 so he is popular with his students .
⑥用詞不當(dāng)， reports 應(yīng)改為 gives lectures .
⑦ offered 前加 has .
⑧ Under 改為 With . with one's help 是固定搭配，意為“在……幫助下”。要注意英漢差別。
精品范文
W . J . Waston was a British， who was born in England in June， 1967. He graduated from a university in 1989， and then came to China with his wife in 1992. Now he is working in No. 1 Middle school as an English teacher.
He loves teaching and is strict in his work. He is always ready to help his students. He has a strange way of making his classes lively and interesting， so he is popular with his students. He often gives lectures to middle school students on how to learn English well.
Now he is an adviser to our paper， and he has offered a lot of good advise With his help， we are doing better in our work.
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習(xí)作評(píng)析（9）之二
elephants have a big nose and big ears and they are kind to humans. We can also see big and little monkeys running and dancing， just like happy children. Pandas， with good manners， are very friendly and polite to visitors. We will certainly have a good time there.
習(xí)作評(píng)析
習(xí)作題目
《學(xué)英語(yǔ)》報(bào)擬在某期頭版介紹英國(guó)語(yǔ)言專(zhuān)家 W . J . Waston， 請(qǐng)你就下面的簡(jiǎn)歷寫(xiě)一篇介紹性的短文（詞數(shù) 100 左右）
姓名： W . J . Waston 性別：男
國(guó)籍：英國(guó)
出生年月： 1967 年 6 月
職業(yè)：英語(yǔ)教師
工作單位：第一中學(xué)
簡(jiǎn)歷： 1989 年大學(xué)畢業(yè)， 1992 年攜妻子來(lái)到中國(guó)。
主要事跡： 1. 熱愛(ài)教育事業(yè)，工作認(rèn)真負(fù)責(zé)，樂(lè)于幫助學(xué)生。
2. 教學(xué)方法多樣，課堂生動(dòng)有趣，深受學(xué)生歡迎。
3. 經(jīng)常為中學(xué)生作如何學(xué)好英語(yǔ)的報(bào)告。
4. 任本報(bào)顧問(wèn)，提出了許多良好的建議。
生詞：畢業(yè) graduate ；顧問(wèn) adviser ；建議 advice
學(xué)生原文
W . J . Waston was British ① . He was born in England in June， 1967. He was graduated from a university in 1989 ② ， and then came to China with his wife in 1992. Now he is working in No. 1 Middle School as an English teacher.
He loves teaching， and is strict with his work ③ . He is always ready to help his students. He had ④ a strange way of making his classes lively and interesting， so he is very liked by his students ⑤ . He often reports to middle school students on how to learn English well ⑥ .
Now he is an adviser to our paper， and he offered a lot of good advices ⑦ . Under ⑧ his help we are doing better in our work.
名師點(diǎn)評(píng)
本篇習(xí)作要點(diǎn)齊全，語(yǔ)言精練，層次分明，基本上完成了寫(xiě)作任務(wù)。但考生在動(dòng)詞的運(yùn)用上應(yīng)多下功夫，要重視英語(yǔ)的習(xí)慣用語(yǔ)。
① British 前加 a .
②去掉 was .
③ with 改為 in， be strict with sb 表示對(duì)人格； be strict in 表示對(duì)工作認(rèn)真。
④ had 改為 has .
⑤本句是典型的漢式英語(yǔ)，最好改為 so he is popular with his students .
⑥用詞不當(dāng)， reports 應(yīng)改為 gives lectures .
⑦ offered 前加 has .
⑧ Under 改為 With . with one's help 是固定搭配，意為“在……幫助下”。要注意英漢差別。
精品范文
W . J . Waston was a British， who was born in England in June， 1967. He graduated from a university in 1989， and then came to China with his wife in 1992. Now he is working in No. 1 Middle school as an English teacher.
He loves teaching and is strict in his work. He is always ready to help his students. He has a strange way of making his classes lively and interesting， so he is popular with his students. He often gives lectures to middle school students on how to learn English well.
Now he is an adviser to our paper， and he has offered a lot of good advise With his help， we are doing better in our work.
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