Sports
寫作指導(dǎo)
體育運動
寫作任務(wù):
假設(shè)你是青山中學(xué)的一名學(xué)生。來自美國的格林隊(Green Team) 將于本周六下午2點來你校,與青山籃球隊(Tsingshan Team) 進行籃球比賽,比賽地點設(shè)在學(xué)校的青山體育館(Tsingshan Gym)。賽后觀眾可以和兩個隊的隊員合影留念,并可選出5位幸運者與他們切磋球技。請你幫忙寫一則英文海報張貼于校內(nèi)外。
要求:
1. 語句通順,書寫規(guī)范；2. 60詞左右(開頭和結(jié)尾已給出,不計入總詞數(shù))。
Basketball Match Notice
Dear friends,
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Tsingshan Middle School
October 6, 2009
寫作分析:
該寫作任務(wù)要求我們寫一則通知,屬于應(yīng)用文的范疇。動筆之前我們要從格式、段落、寫作要點和時態(tài)等方面加以分析。
(1) 格式
格式在寫作要求中已經(jīng)給出,所以在寫作時只要注意不要馬虎就可以了。
(2) 段落
根據(jù)寫作內(nèi)容,我們可以大體上把比賽時間、地點和參賽球隊信息列為一段；賽后活動列為一段。
(3) 寫作要點
根據(jù)寫作任務(wù),我們把海報內(nèi)容分為以下幾方面:
比賽時間:本周六下午2點
比賽地點:青山體育館(Tsing-shan Gym)
參賽球隊:美國的格林隊(Green Team) 和學(xué)校的青山籃球隊(Tsingshan Team)
賽后活動:觀眾可以和兩個隊的隊員合影留念,并可選出5位幸運者與他們切磋球技。這里需要準(zhǔn)備的詞匯有:take photos, lucky people, play basketball with等。
(4) 時態(tài)
因為這場比賽是在本周六即將舉行的,所以應(yīng)以一般將來時態(tài)為主。
初稿:
Basketball Match Notice
Dear friends, there will be a basketball match between Green Team and Tsingshan Team. Green Team from America and Tsingshan Team from our Tsingshan Middle School, and they both played basketball well last year. The match will be held at two o’clock this Saturday afternoon.After the match, you can take photos with the players. Five lucky people among you can play basketball with them. Don’t forget to be on time.
Tsingshan Middle School
October 6, 2009
初稿點評:
初稿段落劃分得很好,時態(tài)運用很恰當(dāng),語言表達也很流暢,但是存在兩個問題:
1. 寫作要點不齊全,比賽的地點被遺漏掉了。如果比賽地點沒交待清楚,觀眾就無法按時到場觀看比賽,這是一個嚴(yán)重的錯誤。我們可以改為:There will be a basketball match between Green Team and Tsingshan Team in Tsingshan Gym of our school.
2. 畫線句子存在語法錯誤,應(yīng)修改為:Green Team is from America and Tsingshan Team is from Tsingshan Middle School and they both played basketball well last year.
下面請看修改稿。
成稿:
Basketball Match Notice
Dear friends, there will be a basketball match between Green Team and Tsingshan Team in Tsingshan Gym. Green Team is from America and Tsingshan Team is from Tsingshan Middle School and they both played basketball well last year. The match will be held at two this Saturday afternoon.
After the match, you can take photos with the players. Five lucky people will be able to play basket-ball with them. Don’t forget to be on time.
Tsingshan Middle School
October 6, 2009
Powerful sentences:
1. The activity is organized by the Chinese Young Pioneers. 這次活動由少先隊組織。
2. It’s time for you to take part in the game. 你該加入比賽了。
3. The match will last five days. 這場比賽將要持續(xù)5天。
4. The game will surprise you. 這場比賽會使你感到吃驚的。
5. The game will be wonderful and you will enjoy yourself. 這場比賽將會很精彩,你會過得很愉快。
鞏固練習(xí):
今年,第十一屆全國運動會將于10月16日在山東開幕,并于10月28日結(jié)束。本次運動會共有33個大項的比賽,這些比賽將分布在全省17座城市中舉行。為吸引外國友人觀看,請你為即將來臨的全運會寫一份海報。
要求:1. 語句通順,要點齊全；2. 50詞左右。
參考詞匯:第十一屆全國運動會The Eleventh National Games
National Games Notice
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參考范文:
National Games Notice
The Eleventh National Games will be held in Shandong Province this year. And it will last from October 16th to October 28th. There are 33 sports at the National Games. They will be organized in seventeen cities of Shandong. People around China will take part in them.
Welcome to Shandong.
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