GRE作文是中國(guó)學(xué)生比較頭痛的，經(jīng)常準(zhǔn)備很多時(shí)間最后還是只得到3.5。我之所以得到6分，個(gè)人認(rèn)為我的文風(fēng)比較淳樸扎實(shí)，有科學(xué)性，寫的思路比較廣(正、反、特)，字?jǐn)?shù)也比較多(I800+、A700+)。
Lookingattheabovestatement,Iseealotoftruthtothestatement.Therearemanywaysthatsocietyhasusedtheadvancedtechnologyinordertoisolatethemselves.Itmayormaynotbeaconsiousmove,buttheresultsareallthesame.Theisolationoccursinavarietyofwaysandinalldifferentareas.Bycomputerizingfactories,therearemoreandmorepeopleworkinglonghoursbythemselves,withthereonlycompanionasacomputermonitor.Althoughthecompanymaybegettingbetterproduction,thequestionthatneedstobeaskisatwhatcosttotheiremployees.
Itisnotonlythemanagementofbigfactoriesthatareresponsibleforthisisolation.Thislonlinesscanbeseeninmanyothersettings.Withthegrowingpopularityofthetelevision,thenationisseeingadeclineinfamiliestalkingandanincreaseinwatchingthetelevision.Notonlycanthisresultinagenerationof"coachpotatoes",itisalsocauseslesscommunicationandafeelingofisolationfromeveryonethatapersoncaresabout.
Sofartechnologyhasenteredtheworkplaceandthehome,ithasalsoenteredthesocialrelm.Whenyougotoorderfoodinthedrive-thru,whoisorbetteryetwhatisitthatyoutalkto?Itisamachine,althoughthereisapersonontheotherend,youarestillrecitingyourordertoamachine.Ifitisteno’clockatnightandyouneedmoney,thereareATM’s.Allofthesegadgetsmaybeveryniceandconvient,buttheyresultinlackofhumancontact. 中華 考試 網(wǎng)
Althoughitmightbeeasytoblametechnolgyforourfeelingsofloneliness,itisjustacopout.Bylookingatallthewaystechnologycausesisolation,itisstillpeoplewhochoosetousetheseconvenientmethods.Ifapersonwantstohavehumancontact,alltheyhavetodoisgoinsidetothebankorgoinsidetheresturaunttoorder.Whatitbasicallyboilsdownto,isthatitisourchoicewhetherornotweusetechnology.Itisascarythoughttothinkmaybeonedaywemightliveinasocietywhereyouwillneverhavetoleaveyourhouse.ThatbyusingFAXmachines,computers,modems,andthetelephoneapersonwouldneverhavetohavehumancontacttogettheirjobdone.Thethingisthatifthatisnotwhatweasasocietywants,wearetheonestospeakoutandchangetheoutcome.
評(píng)價(jià)
Thisresponsepresentsacompetentdiscussionoftheissue.Thepositionpresentedinthefirstparagraph--that"therearemanywaysthatsocietyhasusedtheadvancedtechnologyinordertoisolatethemselves"--isadequatelysustained,buttheexamplesgivenarenotalwaysclearlyrelevant(e.g.,inthecaseofparagraphone’s"computerizing"offactories,thedecisiontousethetechnologyisnotmadebytheindividualworker.)Also,thereasoningisnotdevelopedasfullyasitwouldbeinaresponseatthescorelevelof6or5.
Whileorganizationisadequate,theresponselackstheorganizedcoherenceofideasthatexemplifya5essay.Transitions,withinandbetweenparagraphs,arenotalwayssmoothorlogical.Thelastparagraphcouldbemuchmoreclearlyfocused,i.e.,severalsentencesrepeatthesameidea--that"itisourchoicewhetherornotweusetechnology"--andthepurposeormeaningofothers(e.g.,thelast)isnotimmediatelyclear.
Ingeneral,ideasarepresentedclearly,althoughawkwardphrasingsometimescontributestovagueness(e.g.,"Bylookingatallthewaystechnologycausesisolation,itisstillpeoplewhochoosetousetheseconvenientmethods").Lackofsentencestructurevarietyseemstoinhibitthecommunicationofideas(e.g.,manyshortsentencesareoftenusedwhereoneortwocompoundonescouldmakethepointsmoreeffectively).Overall,thisisanadequateresponsetothetopic. 感謝您閱讀《歷年GRE考試Issue主題范文及評(píng)析03 》一文，出國(guó)留學(xué)網(wǎng)(liuxue86.com)編輯部希望本文能幫助到您。
Lookingattheabovestatement,Iseealotoftruthtothestatement.Therearemanywaysthatsocietyhasusedtheadvancedtechnologyinordertoisolatethemselves.Itmayormaynotbeaconsiousmove,buttheresultsareallthesame.Theisolationoccursinavarietyofwaysandinalldifferentareas.Bycomputerizingfactories,therearemoreandmorepeopleworkinglonghoursbythemselves,withthereonlycompanionasacomputermonitor.Althoughthecompanymaybegettingbetterproduction,thequestionthatneedstobeaskisatwhatcosttotheiremployees.
Itisnotonlythemanagementofbigfactoriesthatareresponsibleforthisisolation.Thislonlinesscanbeseeninmanyothersettings.Withthegrowingpopularityofthetelevision,thenationisseeingadeclineinfamiliestalkingandanincreaseinwatchingthetelevision.Notonlycanthisresultinagenerationof"coachpotatoes",itisalsocauseslesscommunicationandafeelingofisolationfromeveryonethatapersoncaresabout.
Sofartechnologyhasenteredtheworkplaceandthehome,ithasalsoenteredthesocialrelm.Whenyougotoorderfoodinthedrive-thru,whoisorbetteryetwhatisitthatyoutalkto?Itisamachine,althoughthereisapersonontheotherend,youarestillrecitingyourordertoamachine.Ifitisteno’clockatnightandyouneedmoney,thereareATM’s.Allofthesegadgetsmaybeveryniceandconvient,buttheyresultinlackofhumancontact. 中華 考試 網(wǎng)
Althoughitmightbeeasytoblametechnolgyforourfeelingsofloneliness,itisjustacopout.Bylookingatallthewaystechnologycausesisolation,itisstillpeoplewhochoosetousetheseconvenientmethods.Ifapersonwantstohavehumancontact,alltheyhavetodoisgoinsidetothebankorgoinsidetheresturaunttoorder.Whatitbasicallyboilsdownto,isthatitisourchoicewhetherornotweusetechnology.Itisascarythoughttothinkmaybeonedaywemightliveinasocietywhereyouwillneverhavetoleaveyourhouse.ThatbyusingFAXmachines,computers,modems,andthetelephoneapersonwouldneverhavetohavehumancontacttogettheirjobdone.Thethingisthatifthatisnotwhatweasasocietywants,wearetheonestospeakoutandchangetheoutcome.
評(píng)價(jià)
Thisresponsepresentsacompetentdiscussionoftheissue.Thepositionpresentedinthefirstparagraph--that"therearemanywaysthatsocietyhasusedtheadvancedtechnologyinordertoisolatethemselves"--isadequatelysustained,buttheexamplesgivenarenotalwaysclearlyrelevant(e.g.,inthecaseofparagraphone’s"computerizing"offactories,thedecisiontousethetechnologyisnotmadebytheindividualworker.)Also,thereasoningisnotdevelopedasfullyasitwouldbeinaresponseatthescorelevelof6or5.
Whileorganizationisadequate,theresponselackstheorganizedcoherenceofideasthatexemplifya5essay.Transitions,withinandbetweenparagraphs,arenotalwayssmoothorlogical.Thelastparagraphcouldbemuchmoreclearlyfocused,i.e.,severalsentencesrepeatthesameidea--that"itisourchoicewhetherornotweusetechnology"--andthepurposeormeaningofothers(e.g.,thelast)isnotimmediatelyclear.
Ingeneral,ideasarepresentedclearly,althoughawkwardphrasingsometimescontributestovagueness(e.g.,"Bylookingatallthewaystechnologycausesisolation,itisstillpeoplewhochoosetousetheseconvenientmethods").Lackofsentencestructurevarietyseemstoinhibitthecommunicationofideas(e.g.,manyshortsentencesareoftenusedwhereoneortwocompoundonescouldmakethepointsmoreeffectively).Overall,thisisanadequateresponsetothetopic. 感謝您閱讀《歷年GRE考試Issue主題范文及評(píng)析03 》一文，出國(guó)留學(xué)網(wǎng)(liuxue86.com)編輯部希望本文能幫助到您。