GRE寫作成為橫在中國學(xué)生的理想和現(xiàn)實之間的一大障礙，因此，如何攻克寫作這道屏障，成為擺在我們面前的首要任務(wù)。
Thetechnologicaltoolsweasasocietyhavedevelopedarenotinthemselvespositiveornegative,theyarejustthat,tools.Theuses,however,aredefinitelyadifferentstory.Computers,Ibelieveatonetime,weredevelopedtosaveustime.Doourworkmorequicklyforussothatwecouldhavemoreleisuretimetospenddoingthosethingsweenjoy.Wehavefoundnow,especiallythoseofusthatareparents,thatalloftheleisuretimewehavegainediseitherspentwatchingourchildrenlearnthingsonthecomputerorcreatingourownuniquesomethingonthefamilycomputer.Foronething,ithasbecomeaveryfunitem,thecomputershavebecomemorethanjustworkrelatedtechnologicaltools.Theamountofhumaninteractionislimited,becausepeopleingeneralarespendingmuchoftheirleisuretimedoingsoloonthecomputer.Inthepast,itwascommonforthenewyoungexectutivetogetamembershiptotheexerciseclubasaperk,wherehecouldsocializewiththeuppercrust.Nowthenewyoungexec.getsacarphoneoraportablefax,sothathecanworkfromwhereeverheis,usuallydoingthatsolotriptosomewhere.Giventheseasexamples,Iwouldtendtoagreewiththestatementthatlonlinesshasincreasedasadirectresult.
評價
Thisresponseislimitedinbothitsanalysisoftheissueanditscontroloflanguage. 考試用書
Thewriterclearlyexpressestheideathat"thetechnologicaltoolsweasasocietyhavedevelopedarenotinthemselvespositiveornegative."However,theessayprovidesonlylimitedsupportfortheposition;thetwoexamplesarelooselyconnectedandundeveloped.
Attimestheorganizationoftheessaymakesforconfusingreading.Forexample,therelevanceofthe"youngexecutive"exampleisnotclearbecausethereisnotransitionfromtheprecedingexampleofthecomputer.Theconclusion,onesentencelong,simplyrestatestheclaimmadeinthetopic.
Theawkwardsentencesareevidenceofalimitedfluency.Greateruseofcompoundsentencescouldhelpeliminatestructuralproblemsandfacilitatethecommunicationofideas(e.g.,sentences3and4couldbecombined).
Forallofthesereasons,theessayreceivedascoreof3. 感謝您閱讀《歷年GRE考試Issue主題范文及評析04 》一文，出國留學(xué)網(wǎng)(liuxue86.com)編輯部希望本文能幫助到您。
Thetechnologicaltoolsweasasocietyhavedevelopedarenotinthemselvespositiveornegative,theyarejustthat,tools.Theuses,however,aredefinitelyadifferentstory.Computers,Ibelieveatonetime,weredevelopedtosaveustime.Doourworkmorequicklyforussothatwecouldhavemoreleisuretimetospenddoingthosethingsweenjoy.Wehavefoundnow,especiallythoseofusthatareparents,thatalloftheleisuretimewehavegainediseitherspentwatchingourchildrenlearnthingsonthecomputerorcreatingourownuniquesomethingonthefamilycomputer.Foronething,ithasbecomeaveryfunitem,thecomputershavebecomemorethanjustworkrelatedtechnologicaltools.Theamountofhumaninteractionislimited,becausepeopleingeneralarespendingmuchoftheirleisuretimedoingsoloonthecomputer.Inthepast,itwascommonforthenewyoungexectutivetogetamembershiptotheexerciseclubasaperk,wherehecouldsocializewiththeuppercrust.Nowthenewyoungexec.getsacarphoneoraportablefax,sothathecanworkfromwhereeverheis,usuallydoingthatsolotriptosomewhere.Giventheseasexamples,Iwouldtendtoagreewiththestatementthatlonlinesshasincreasedasadirectresult.
評價
Thisresponseislimitedinbothitsanalysisoftheissueanditscontroloflanguage. 考試用書
Thewriterclearlyexpressestheideathat"thetechnologicaltoolsweasasocietyhavedevelopedarenotinthemselvespositiveornegative."However,theessayprovidesonlylimitedsupportfortheposition;thetwoexamplesarelooselyconnectedandundeveloped.
Attimestheorganizationoftheessaymakesforconfusingreading.Forexample,therelevanceofthe"youngexecutive"exampleisnotclearbecausethereisnotransitionfromtheprecedingexampleofthecomputer.Theconclusion,onesentencelong,simplyrestatestheclaimmadeinthetopic.
Theawkwardsentencesareevidenceofalimitedfluency.Greateruseofcompoundsentencescouldhelpeliminatestructuralproblemsandfacilitatethecommunicationofideas(e.g.,sentences3and4couldbecombined).
Forallofthesereasons,theessayreceivedascoreof3. 感謝您閱讀《歷年GRE考試Issue主題范文及評析04 》一文，出國留學(xué)網(wǎng)(liuxue86.com)編輯部希望本文能幫助到您。