GRE作文是中國學(xué)生比較頭痛的，經(jīng)常準(zhǔn)備很多時間最后還是只得到3.5。我之所以得到6分，個人認(rèn)為我的文風(fēng)比較淳樸扎實，有科學(xué)性，寫的思路比較廣(正、反、特)，字?jǐn)?shù)也比較多(I800+、A700+)。
Atnoothertimetheninourpresenttimehastheneedforunityandtogethernessbeenmorenecessarytotheinhabitantsonourplanet.Formanydecadesthemottohasbeenoneofwasteanddenial.Theworldisinarace-racingtobecomenumberone-racingtodestroytheearth.Traditionsofprotectingtheearthhavebeenabandonedastheneedtosatisfyinfantileneedsanddesireswinsoutoverthemorephilosophicaldesiresofthoughtandmeaning.Unfortunatelymanydonotseetheneedforreformsinactionsandthought;peoplearelivingfortodayandnottomorrow.Thosethatcanbelieveinafuture,andexhibitadesiretomakeadifferenceinthisfuturemustfindawaytoinfluencetheremainingmasses,andoftenitseemsthattheworldsimplyrefusedtolistenorlearnfromitspastmistakes.
Thosethatanswerthiscallingwillnotdosofornotiority,butinsteadfortheirbeliefsthattheycanmakeadifference.Theywillneedtobeofstrongheart,body,soul,andbeliefs.Understandingtheneedforanoverhaulinoursystemintherampantabusesisthefirststeptoobtainingadvancementinthestruggletobringtheworldtogetherinawaythatwillbenefitmankindtodayandtomorrow.
FortoomanyyearsAmerican’shavepersuadedthemselvesthattheenvirnomentwasinnodanger.Everyyearlawshavebeenpassedtoprotectourland,animals,andevenourpeople.Moreoftenthannotthereareloopholesintheselaws,allowingtheenvironmenttoremaininperil.Itseemsthatweoftenforgetthatwearenottheonlyonesonearth.Weareonlyasmallpercentage,andmuchtoooftenouractionshaveagreateffectonthosethatmustsubsistonthisearthaswell.OnethreateningexampleofthisisthedepletionoftherainforestsintheCentralandSouthAmericas.ItseemsdifficultforAmericanstounderstandhowthesepeoplecandestroytheirnaturallandscapes.Notonlyisthelandscapeddestroyedandtheinvaluableplantsandanimallifearealsodestroyed,andthesecanneverberecovered.Americansexpresstheirannoyanceatsuchpractices,failingtoseethatweasconsumersareoneofthemaincausesofsuchactions.Asaconsumersocietywedependonwoodandothermaterialsfromtheseareas.Unfortunatelytheseareasarenothinglikewhatweseeathome,insteaditisaworldofunimaginablepovertyandharshness.Intheseareaswherepovertyissoprevalentoftentheonlymeansofsurvivalisfoundthroughtheclearingofthepreciousrainforestforfarmland.Certainlythefactthatthesepeoplearefarminginordertomaintaintheirsurvivalisimportantandcannotbeoverlooked.Yet,inmostcasesthefarmingisnotdoneasameansofraisingfoodandlivestockfortheirownuses.ThislandisusuallyusedtogrowfoodforothercountriessuchasAmerica.Thisscenariodepictsthewickednessthathasbecomeofourworld.Thefirstworldnationsaredestroyingthesecondandthirdworldnationsinordertofuelourexcessivedesires.
Theworldmustfindawaytocometogethersothattherewillbeatomorrowforeveryone.NewlegislationmustbepassedthatprotectsnotonlytheenvironmentofAmerica,buttheenvironmentsofothercountries.Bigbusinessmustalsorealizethattheycannolongerusedirtylegislationandkickbackstocontinuetopollutetheearth.
Anotherimportantaspectthatpeoplemustlearnisthatifwecannotlearntorecycleandreducewaste,onedaywewillrunoutofdumpingground.Itisfrighteningtothinkthatthisiswhatitwilltotaketomakemostpeoplerealizethatactionsmustbetakentocleanupourearth.Itseemsthatwewillonlybeabletocometogetherwhenthereisnototheralternative.Perhapsthemustunfathomablethoughtis,whathappensifpeopledonotunitetogethernowtoprotectourenvironment.Itcanonlyseemthatwewillonceagainbethreatenedwithwaraswefighteachothertodeathoverthelastpreciousmilesoflandandfood.Civilizationwillhavecomefullcircle;allofourtechnologicalandscientificadvanceswillmeannothingiftheearthisdestroyedandmankindsubsequentlywipedoutwithit wｗw.ExamＷ.CoM
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Thisisagenerallywell-developedessaythatexaminesthecomplexitiesoftheissueanddemonstratesgoodcontroloftheelementsofeffectivewriting.
Thewriterstronglyagreeswiththetopic’sclaimandusesthefirstparagraphtoexpandontheideathatenvironmentalproblemsimperiltheearth.Theseproblems,accordingtothewriter,derivefrompeople’slackofmaturity("infantileneedsanddesires")andlackofforesight("peoplearelivingfortodayandnottomorrow.")
Thethirdparagraphprovidesahighlyrelevantexampleofthecomplexitiesinvolvedintheissue,showinghowdamagetotherainforestcanbeattributedbothtopovertyinLatinAmericaandtothevoraciousappetiteofthewealthyNorthAmerican"consumersociety."Fromherethewriterreturnstothefocusonplanningfor"tomorrow"andproposesaspecificremedy("Newlegislationmustbepassed????")Theessaycloseswithapassionatedescriptionofanegativescenarioforthefuture.
Theresponseiswellorganizedbut,unlikea6essay,doesnotsustainatightfocus.Althoughtheexampleoftherainforestdegradationishighlyrelevantandfullydeveloped,manyofthereasonsandassertionsreceiveonlycursorydevelopmentorexplanation("newlegislationmustbepassed????Itcanonlyseemthatwewillonceagainbethreatenedwithwar????").
Thesentencestructureintheessayisoftennicelyvaried("Notonlyisthelandscapeddestroyedbut????"),butitisattimeschoppy("Thislandis????""Thisscenariodepicts????""Thefirstworldnations????")
Thevocabularyisgenerallywellchosen,withwordssuchas"depletion,""unfathomable,"and"subsequently."However,thephrasingisattimesimprecise,asintheseexamples:"Weareonlyasmallpercentage,"and"Atnoothertimetheninourpresenttimehastheneed???beenmorenecessary????" 感謝您閱讀《歷年GRE考試Issue主題范文及評析14 》一文，出國留學(xué)網(wǎng)(liuxue86.com)編輯部希望本文能幫助到您。
Atnoothertimetheninourpresenttimehastheneedforunityandtogethernessbeenmorenecessarytotheinhabitantsonourplanet.Formanydecadesthemottohasbeenoneofwasteanddenial.Theworldisinarace-racingtobecomenumberone-racingtodestroytheearth.Traditionsofprotectingtheearthhavebeenabandonedastheneedtosatisfyinfantileneedsanddesireswinsoutoverthemorephilosophicaldesiresofthoughtandmeaning.Unfortunatelymanydonotseetheneedforreformsinactionsandthought;peoplearelivingfortodayandnottomorrow.Thosethatcanbelieveinafuture,andexhibitadesiretomakeadifferenceinthisfuturemustfindawaytoinfluencetheremainingmasses,andoftenitseemsthattheworldsimplyrefusedtolistenorlearnfromitspastmistakes.
Thosethatanswerthiscallingwillnotdosofornotiority,butinsteadfortheirbeliefsthattheycanmakeadifference.Theywillneedtobeofstrongheart,body,soul,andbeliefs.Understandingtheneedforanoverhaulinoursystemintherampantabusesisthefirststeptoobtainingadvancementinthestruggletobringtheworldtogetherinawaythatwillbenefitmankindtodayandtomorrow.
FortoomanyyearsAmerican’shavepersuadedthemselvesthattheenvirnomentwasinnodanger.Everyyearlawshavebeenpassedtoprotectourland,animals,andevenourpeople.Moreoftenthannotthereareloopholesintheselaws,allowingtheenvironmenttoremaininperil.Itseemsthatweoftenforgetthatwearenottheonlyonesonearth.Weareonlyasmallpercentage,andmuchtoooftenouractionshaveagreateffectonthosethatmustsubsistonthisearthaswell.OnethreateningexampleofthisisthedepletionoftherainforestsintheCentralandSouthAmericas.ItseemsdifficultforAmericanstounderstandhowthesepeoplecandestroytheirnaturallandscapes.Notonlyisthelandscapeddestroyedandtheinvaluableplantsandanimallifearealsodestroyed,andthesecanneverberecovered.Americansexpresstheirannoyanceatsuchpractices,failingtoseethatweasconsumersareoneofthemaincausesofsuchactions.Asaconsumersocietywedependonwoodandothermaterialsfromtheseareas.Unfortunatelytheseareasarenothinglikewhatweseeathome,insteaditisaworldofunimaginablepovertyandharshness.Intheseareaswherepovertyissoprevalentoftentheonlymeansofsurvivalisfoundthroughtheclearingofthepreciousrainforestforfarmland.Certainlythefactthatthesepeoplearefarminginordertomaintaintheirsurvivalisimportantandcannotbeoverlooked.Yet,inmostcasesthefarmingisnotdoneasameansofraisingfoodandlivestockfortheirownuses.ThislandisusuallyusedtogrowfoodforothercountriessuchasAmerica.Thisscenariodepictsthewickednessthathasbecomeofourworld.Thefirstworldnationsaredestroyingthesecondandthirdworldnationsinordertofuelourexcessivedesires.
Theworldmustfindawaytocometogethersothattherewillbeatomorrowforeveryone.NewlegislationmustbepassedthatprotectsnotonlytheenvironmentofAmerica,buttheenvironmentsofothercountries.Bigbusinessmustalsorealizethattheycannolongerusedirtylegislationandkickbackstocontinuetopollutetheearth.
Anotherimportantaspectthatpeoplemustlearnisthatifwecannotlearntorecycleandreducewaste,onedaywewillrunoutofdumpingground.Itisfrighteningtothinkthatthisiswhatitwilltotaketomakemostpeoplerealizethatactionsmustbetakentocleanupourearth.Itseemsthatwewillonlybeabletocometogetherwhenthereisnototheralternative.Perhapsthemustunfathomablethoughtis,whathappensifpeopledonotunitetogethernowtoprotectourenvironment.Itcanonlyseemthatwewillonceagainbethreatenedwithwaraswefighteachothertodeathoverthelastpreciousmilesoflandandfood.Civilizationwillhavecomefullcircle;allofourtechnologicalandscientificadvanceswillmeannothingiftheearthisdestroyedandmankindsubsequentlywipedoutwithit wｗw.ExamＷ.CoM
評價
Thisisagenerallywell-developedessaythatexaminesthecomplexitiesoftheissueanddemonstratesgoodcontroloftheelementsofeffectivewriting.
Thewriterstronglyagreeswiththetopic’sclaimandusesthefirstparagraphtoexpandontheideathatenvironmentalproblemsimperiltheearth.Theseproblems,accordingtothewriter,derivefrompeople’slackofmaturity("infantileneedsanddesires")andlackofforesight("peoplearelivingfortodayandnottomorrow.")
Thethirdparagraphprovidesahighlyrelevantexampleofthecomplexitiesinvolvedintheissue,showinghowdamagetotherainforestcanbeattributedbothtopovertyinLatinAmericaandtothevoraciousappetiteofthewealthyNorthAmerican"consumersociety."Fromherethewriterreturnstothefocusonplanningfor"tomorrow"andproposesaspecificremedy("Newlegislationmustbepassed????")Theessaycloseswithapassionatedescriptionofanegativescenarioforthefuture.
Theresponseiswellorganizedbut,unlikea6essay,doesnotsustainatightfocus.Althoughtheexampleoftherainforestdegradationishighlyrelevantandfullydeveloped,manyofthereasonsandassertionsreceiveonlycursorydevelopmentorexplanation("newlegislationmustbepassed????Itcanonlyseemthatwewillonceagainbethreatenedwithwar????").
Thesentencestructureintheessayisoftennicelyvaried("Notonlyisthelandscapeddestroyedbut????"),butitisattimeschoppy("Thislandis????""Thisscenariodepicts????""Thefirstworldnations????")
Thevocabularyisgenerallywellchosen,withwordssuchas"depletion,""unfathomable,"and"subsequently."However,thephrasingisattimesimprecise,asintheseexamples:"Weareonlyasmallpercentage,"and"Atnoothertimetheninourpresenttimehastheneed???beenmorenecessary????" 感謝您閱讀《歷年GRE考試Issue主題范文及評析14 》一文，出國留學(xué)網(wǎng)(liuxue86.com)編輯部希望本文能幫助到您。