GRE寫作成為橫在中國(guó)學(xué)生的理想和現(xiàn)實(shí)之間的一大障礙，因此，如何攻克寫作這道屏障，成為擺在我們面前的首要任務(wù)。
Intodayssocietywespendtomuchtimeaddressingissuesthatwillnotprepareusforthetrialsandtributlationsfacingouryoungpeople.
Forexample,thereisawarondrugsthatiseffectingeveryfamilyinamerica,withoutanyconsiderationforrace,gender,orenthicbackground.Thiscountryneedstodevelopasystermonhowtodealwiththisongoingproblemeffectingamericans.Therearecertainissuesthatconstantlytakecenterstageinamerica;forexampleracerelationshasreturntothehorribledaysofthefifiths.Thereisknowdoubtthatwearefacingtroublingtimes,andwearenotpayingattentiontowhatisgoingon.Weneedtogetbacktoourvaluesysterm,family,work,church,andresponsibilityandemphasistoourchildrentheimportancyofeducationandrespectofothers.Ifweprovideahealthymodelwecanhelpcurvetheviolenceandmayheamthethatisdestroyingourschools,citiesandstates.
Finally,ifweareproudofbeingamericans,lesstakethisproblemanddosomethingaboutitbydiversitytrainingandmulti-culturalactivities. 中華考試網(wǎng)(www．liuxue86。com)
Sincerely,
評(píng)價(jià)
Thisessayprovideslittleevidenceofacoherentresponsetothetopicandcontainssevereandpersistenterrorsinlanguageandsentencestructure.
Theessayseemstodefine"environment"broadly,thoughvaguely,asthe"culturalenvironment."Whiletheideathatenvironmentalproblemsarefundamentallyculturalinorigincouldbethebasisforapromisingessay,thisresponsedoesnotcoherentlydevelopthatidea.Moreover,thewriterdoesnotaddresstheissue’sclaimsaboutinternationalcooperation.Insteadtheessayjumpsfromproblemtoproblemwithoutadequatelydescribingthoseproblems.Forexample,"thewarondrugs"isreferredtoasaproblem,butitisnotclearwhetheritislawenforcement’s"war"ondrugsorpeople’suseofdrugsthatistheissue.
Theessaycontainsnumerouserrorsthatinterferewithcomprehension.Theseincludeerrorsinwordusage("emphasistoourchildren,""lesstakethisproblem")andgrammar("racerelationshasreturnto").Finally,theessayendswithaclosing("Sincerely")thatismoreappropriateforaletterthananessay. 感謝您閱讀《歷年GRE考試Issue主題范文及評(píng)析18 》一文，出國(guó)留學(xué)網(wǎng)(liuxue86.com)編輯部希望本文能幫助到您。
Intodayssocietywespendtomuchtimeaddressingissuesthatwillnotprepareusforthetrialsandtributlationsfacingouryoungpeople.
Forexample,thereisawarondrugsthatiseffectingeveryfamilyinamerica,withoutanyconsiderationforrace,gender,orenthicbackground.Thiscountryneedstodevelopasystermonhowtodealwiththisongoingproblemeffectingamericans.Therearecertainissuesthatconstantlytakecenterstageinamerica;forexampleracerelationshasreturntothehorribledaysofthefifiths.Thereisknowdoubtthatwearefacingtroublingtimes,andwearenotpayingattentiontowhatisgoingon.Weneedtogetbacktoourvaluesysterm,family,work,church,andresponsibilityandemphasistoourchildrentheimportancyofeducationandrespectofothers.Ifweprovideahealthymodelwecanhelpcurvetheviolenceandmayheamthethatisdestroyingourschools,citiesandstates.
Finally,ifweareproudofbeingamericans,lesstakethisproblemanddosomethingaboutitbydiversitytrainingandmulti-culturalactivities. 中華考試網(wǎng)(www．liuxue86。com)
Sincerely,
評(píng)價(jià)
Thisessayprovideslittleevidenceofacoherentresponsetothetopicandcontainssevereandpersistenterrorsinlanguageandsentencestructure.
Theessayseemstodefine"environment"broadly,thoughvaguely,asthe"culturalenvironment."Whiletheideathatenvironmentalproblemsarefundamentallyculturalinorigincouldbethebasisforapromisingessay,thisresponsedoesnotcoherentlydevelopthatidea.Moreover,thewriterdoesnotaddresstheissue’sclaimsaboutinternationalcooperation.Insteadtheessayjumpsfromproblemtoproblemwithoutadequatelydescribingthoseproblems.Forexample,"thewarondrugs"isreferredtoasaproblem,butitisnotclearwhetheritislawenforcement’s"war"ondrugsorpeople’suseofdrugsthatistheissue.
Theessaycontainsnumerouserrorsthatinterferewithcomprehension.Theseincludeerrorsinwordusage("emphasistoourchildren,""lesstakethisproblem")andgrammar("racerelationshasreturnto").Finally,theessayendswithaclosing("Sincerely")thatismoreappropriateforaletterthananessay. 感謝您閱讀《歷年GRE考試Issue主題范文及評(píng)析18 》一文，出國(guó)留學(xué)網(wǎng)(liuxue86.com)編輯部希望本文能幫助到您。