本段文章還是書接上次的那篇滿分作文，務(wù)必要做到把這篇滿分作文細(xì)細(xì)的分析透才可罷休。這篇30分的作文，真的是唱作俱佳，德藝雙馨^_^，貌似這是郭德綱老師的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)。其實(shí)當(dāng)各位考生準(zhǔn)備托福作文的時(shí)候，最難的不是去練，也不是去模仿。其實(shí)最難的是缺乏一個(gè)標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，不知道寫到什么程度才算是高分的作文。這才是限制廣大考生的最關(guān)鍵的瓶頸。也就是為什么很多考生能考到20分，甚至23分，但是從此以后就很難再進(jìn)一步提升，就是這個(gè)原因。希望無(wú)老師對(duì)這篇文章的分析，能夠?qū)Ω魑豢加延兴鶈l(fā)，找到通向高分作文的路徑^_^
無(wú)老師優(yōu)秀范例：Firstly, art museums and music performance center is no more important than recreational facilities. Admittedly, art museums and music performance is of great importance. Confucius, greatest Chinese philosopher, commented, “Art helps a person gets a better life.” To go to art museums to appreciate those art works and to go the music performance center to listen to symphony help people get improvement in mental life. But it does not mean thatrecreational facilities take the second place.
無(wú)老師中文翻譯：第一點(diǎn)，藝術(shù)館和音樂廳遠(yuǎn)比不上娛樂設(shè)施重要。我們必須承認(rèn)，藝術(shù)館和音樂廳也是有其自身的價(jià)值的?？鬃?，一個(gè)偉大的中國(guó)的哲學(xué)家，就曾經(jīng)說(shuō)過(guò)：“藝術(shù)會(huì)賦予人更愉悅的生活”。去藝術(shù)館欣賞藝術(shù)品，和去音樂廳聆聽交響樂可以幫助我們改善自己的精神世界。但這并不意味著娛樂設(shè)施就沒有藝術(shù)館和音樂廳重要。
無(wú)老師平庸示例：First, recreational facilities are more important than art museums and music performance center. We believe art museums and music performance center values a lot. Confucius, greatest Chinese philosopher, said art may give more pleasure. Watching art in the art museums, and Listening the music in the music performance center can improve our spirit world. But it does not mean recreational facilities is less improtant than art museums and music performance center.
無(wú)老師精析：優(yōu)秀范例先來(lái)：Firstly, art museums and music performance center is no more important than recreational facilities.對(duì)比平庸范例First, recreational facilities are more important than art museums and music performance center.
無(wú)老師優(yōu)秀范例：Firstly, art museums and music performance center is no more important than recreational facilities. Admittedly, art museums and music performance is of great importance. Confucius, greatest Chinese philosopher, commented, “Art helps a person gets a better life.” To go to art museums to appreciate those art works and to go the music performance center to listen to symphony help people get improvement in mental life. But it does not mean thatrecreational facilities take the second place.
無(wú)老師中文翻譯：第一點(diǎn)，藝術(shù)館和音樂廳遠(yuǎn)比不上娛樂設(shè)施重要。我們必須承認(rèn)，藝術(shù)館和音樂廳也是有其自身的價(jià)值的?？鬃?，一個(gè)偉大的中國(guó)的哲學(xué)家，就曾經(jīng)說(shuō)過(guò)：“藝術(shù)會(huì)賦予人更愉悅的生活”。去藝術(shù)館欣賞藝術(shù)品，和去音樂廳聆聽交響樂可以幫助我們改善自己的精神世界。但這并不意味著娛樂設(shè)施就沒有藝術(shù)館和音樂廳重要。
無(wú)老師平庸示例：First, recreational facilities are more important than art museums and music performance center. We believe art museums and music performance center values a lot. Confucius, greatest Chinese philosopher, said art may give more pleasure. Watching art in the art museums, and Listening the music in the music performance center can improve our spirit world. But it does not mean recreational facilities is less improtant than art museums and music performance center.
無(wú)老師精析：優(yōu)秀范例先來(lái)：Firstly, art museums and music performance center is no more important than recreational facilities.對(duì)比平庸范例First, recreational facilities are more important than art museums and music performance center.