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2021年10月9日雅思寫作考試真題
話題分類 社會話題
大作文題目 Some people think it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams， like football. Others think taking part in individual sports， like swimming， is better. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
寫作思路
注：考試作文正確寫作思路詳見評論區(qū)！可以靈活運用不同話題的寫作素材，搭建雙邊論證的寫作結構。額外的財富能夠增加人們的收入，同時政府也有更多預算提供公共服務，能夠改善公眾的福利，提升滿意度。但是如果額外財富的獲得破壞了環(huán)境，損害了人們的健康，那么人們并不會從中獲得幸福感，反而需要承受環(huán)境破壞造成的危害。此外，如果額外的財富沒有公平分配，導致貧富差距擴大，引發(fā)一系列社會問題，人們的幸福感也會降低。
重點詞匯與語料
emphasize 強調
participant 參加者
defeat its rival 擊敗對手
win the game 贏得比賽
develop team spirit 培養(yǎng)團隊精神
complicated task 復雜的任務
enlarge the social circle 擴大社交圈
value 重視
wider connections 更廣的人脈
overstate 夸大
impede 阻礙
hone their skills 訓練他們的技能
distraction 干擾
keep in mind 記住
參考范文
Some sports activities such as football and baseball need to be played by a group of people and it is claimed that players can benefit more from these than from individual sports. In fact， both have their advantages and it is hard to say which kind of activity is more beneficial.
All group sports emphasize cooperation of participants. For example， in a football game， all players need to work closely and only with every member’s effort combined， can the team defeat its rival and win the game. In this process， participants learn how to cooperate with others and thus develop team spirit. This can benefit people in their work， as cooperation is the key to success in many complicated tasks. Besides， in team sports， people have the opportunity to enlarge their social circles and improve their social skills. These are highly valued in the modern society， giving people wider connections and more access to information.
However， it is argued that the role of group sports is overstated and individual sports are better. Participating in team sports in which cooperation is emphasized may lead to some players’ dependence on others and impede individuals’ personal development. Instead， such sports as playing tennis and swimming require players to hone their skills alone and keep in mind that they can only rely on themselves to win the game. In these sports， players can better focus on what they are doing， without distraction from others. They can learn skills and qualities that are more valuable for their future development.
In my opinion， people can benefit largely from group sports， but individual sports also teach people how to succeed without others’ support.
評分標準
評分標準一：寫作任務回應
針對這個部分，你要怎么做？
寫作任務回應有4個要點，你達標了嗎？
◇ 你的作文是否回答了題目中所涵蓋的內(nèi)容。
◇ 你是否能寫出一個平衡的論點，并且用論證來支撐自己的觀點。
◇ 你是否所有的觀點都與題目相關。
◇ 你的文章字數(shù)是否達到250詞要求。
要做到7分，同學們需要回應各個部分的寫作任務，并且在回應寫作任務的過程中始終觀點清晰。
這里給烤鴨們提供一個方法，在寫作前后問自己兩個問題。方法如下：
寫作前：該題目的關鍵詞是什么？作文的立場是什么？
寫作完成后：開頭段和主體段是否回應了題目要求的寫作任務？文章是否表明了立場？
學會了嗎？馬上用題目帶你走一遍！
例題：Many people use distance-learning programs（power point； internet etc） to study at home， but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefits of attending college or university. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion？
首先，讓我們一起來分析題目：該題目的主題是教育，提到了遠程教育與傳統(tǒng)教育，題目想問的是對人類來說，遠程教育不能替代傳統(tǒng)教育的優(yōu)勢。
思考一下，你認為題目里面的關鍵詞是什么呢？立場又是什么呢？
揭曉答案啦~根據(jù)前面的分析，咱們這道題的關鍵詞可概括為：遠程教育；傳統(tǒng)教育；優(yōu)點；學院或大學
咱們的立場可以是：探討這兩種教學模式的優(yōu)點，通過對比論證傳統(tǒng)教育or遠程教育的不可替代性，然后給出自己的回答。
同桌君來給你開個頭：（咱們開頭這樣回應）
With the wider development of internet and relevant technology， distance learning is gaining increasing popularity. While I agree online courses are convenient and beneficial， I believe it can never be the same as classroom-teaching.
由于篇幅原因，大家自行練習主體段啦，我相信聰明的你肯定掌握了（寫完記得提問檢查哦）~
評分標準二：連貫與銜接
針對這個部分，你要怎么做？
這里不得不提到大家都很熟悉的雅思文章結構：1開頭段--2主體段--1結尾段。
我們在寫主體段的時候，我們常用的結構可以是IEE：論點（idea），論據(jù)（explain），論證（example）。
在此基礎上，作文的各個段落間聯(lián)系緊密，共同支撐文章觀點，連貫性與銜接性就是文章能傳夠達好信息的關鍵。
我們要清楚，連貫性要求我們的文章組織架構以及行文邏輯的清晰度。這里的建議是：
咱們在考試中一定要列提綱。一個好的提綱可以反過來幫助我們自我檢查自己的論點是否與題目相呼應，是否滿足寫作回應的任務要求。
提綱要求：寫下幾個關鍵詞（論點），讓自己在后續(xù)書寫整篇作文時將提綱中的點連成線，幫助自己理清邏輯和思路。
什么是銜接？
其實，就是文章內(nèi)部的邏輯連接詞，通常在句與句間；論點與論點間；段與段間的銜接。雅思作文對于銜接著重考察銜接詞的使用。
下面列舉我們常用的一些銜接詞，快拿小本本記好哦：
表開始：first of all， to begin with， for one thing， in the first place
表觀點：in my opinion， from my perspective， as far as I am concerned
舉例說明：for example， for instance， in particular， such as
表原因：because， since， due to， owing to， given the fact that...
表結果：therefore， as a result， consequently， thus， hence
表遞進：in addition， what’s more， furthermore， besides
表轉折：However，nevertheless， on the other hand， but