下面是由出國留學網(wǎng)為你帶來的《2014年8月9日雅思寫作解析及范文》，對比自己所寫文章，找出差異，補齊優(yōu)點，對今后的作文練習也是有所裨益的，這次的寫作時關(guān)于年輕人進行的危險性的極限運動，有人認為應該禁止，有人認為應該自由選擇，不知你的看法是如何呢，下面一起來看看專家級的寫作解析是怎樣的吧。
小編提示：文無定法，自然開篇，可以摒棄常規(guī)寫法，可以讓主題留有懸念，主體段落自然論證極限運動的利弊，從而得出你的思考結(jié)論，邏輯分明，有理有據(jù)，拿高分便不是問題，希望對你的寫作有所幫助。
Task2：
Some people think government should ban dangerous sports and some others think it is a freedom to choose the activities we want to. Discuss both view and give your opinion. 有人認為政府應該禁止年輕人們從事危險性的運動,有人認為人們有自由選擇自己喜歡的運動方式,討論兩種觀點, 給出你的意見.
范文解析版本一，普通版：
Some people think government should ban dangerous sports and some others think it is a freedom to choose the activities we want to. Discuss both view and give your opinion. 有人認為政府應該禁止年輕人們從事危險性的運動,有人認為人們有自由選擇自己喜歡的運動方式,討論兩種觀點, 給出你的意見.
作家立場：反對極限運動
布局圖：
首段：背景介紹 + 爭議焦點 + 作家立場
二段：第一次支持主題觀點的論據(jù)以及細節(jié)展開
三段：第二次支持主題觀點的論據(jù)以及細節(jié)展開
四段：談及不同意的觀點的合理性 + 加以反駁
尾段：再次亮明觀點+總結(jié)理由
首段：背景介紹 + 爭議焦點 + 作家立場
Such is human nature to look for the sense of excitement and experience the unknown that is why some people, especially youngsters, are fond of taking up some risky sports such as bungee jumping or deep-sea diving. Although it is the basic right of every individual to choose their favorite sports activities, some highly dangerous sports events should be discouraged. (60)
翻譯：追求刺激，體驗未知是之人本性，也就解釋了為何很多人，尤其是年輕人，喜歡從事一些例如蹦極或者深海潛水類的極限運動。經(jīng)管選擇喜愛的競技體育項目是人之本性，我認為不應該從事一些危險性高的體育運動。
二段：第一次支持作家立場：
I first turn to my personal experience to prove my view. The chances of getting hurt will increase if we get involved in some dangerous sports activities without some proper and enough protection measures. This debate reminds me of a trip to Bing Yugou. So attractive was the sky jumping there that a lot of teenagers dared to give it try. Unfortunately, instead of tasting the excitement, one of my peers unexpectedly got injured because the protection equipment was out of control， therefore, it was a nightmare to see people of my age risk getting hurt in the hope of challenging himself. (103)
翻譯：第一，我個人的經(jīng)歷就可以證明我的立場，我們?nèi)绻麖氖乱恍┪ｋU性的運動，沒有適當保護措施，很容易受到傷害。這個話題使我想起了一次去冰峪溝的旅行經(jīng)歷，高空蹦極很吸引人，很多年輕人大膽嘗試，不幸的是，我的一個同齡人意外受傷，因為保護設備出現(xiàn)故障，因此，看到年輕人因為挑戰(zhàn)自己，追求刺激而受傷真是可怕的事情。
二段：第二次支持作家立場：
To be sure, to pursue private interests and enjoy fresh leisure activities is what many of us desire to do. However, some sports events containing violent elements might, sometimes, become an excuse of passing on violence. Boxing match is a good case in point. I can never accept the cruel and bloody scene when seeing a boxer is bitterly beaten up by his rival. It can be imagined that some inexperienced and immature teenagers might be misguided. It is highly possible that they might take it for granted that violence is the best way to solve the problem. In this sense, dangerous sports events might lead to school bullying or teenage crime. (112)
翻譯：誠然，追求興趣，享受樂趣是我們渴望的，但是，一些含有暴力元素的競技體育項目有時候會成為宣揚暴力的借口。拳擊比賽就是很好的例證?？吹饺直粚κ滞磽?，我是無法接受這樣血腥暴力的場景。可以想象，年輕人經(jīng)驗不足，又不成熟，他們很容易被誤導，他們會想當然地認為暴力是最佳的解決問題的途徑，因此，危險性高的競技體育運動可能會導致校園欺凌或是少年犯罪。
三段：談及不同意的觀點的合理性，再加以反駁：
Some people, however, might remain suspicious of my standpoint. After all, every individual needs to have a unique approach to get relaxed and savor pleasure. An argument might be hold by some people is that a man with great courage is supposed to dare to constantly try and experience new things including those adventurous sports events. However, I want to argue that we can never seek excitement at the cost of suffering from injury or pain. (76)
翻譯：有些人也許懷疑我的立場，畢竟，每人都有自己獨特的方式來放松自己，品味快樂。有人也許認為，有勇氣的人應該敢于不斷自我嘗試，體驗新鮮事物，包括一些危險的運動。但是，為了追求刺激而受傷害太不值得。
尾段：再次亮明觀點 + 總結(jié)理由
In the final analysis, my would like to stress my view that it is a hasty proposal to allow and encourage dangerous sports activities because those who dive into those adventures might get hurt, meanwhile，some risky sports activities might become the excuse of popularizing violence. (46)
翻譯：總之，我再次強調(diào)我的立場，允許和鼓勵危險性的運動是很草率的建議，因為那些從事冒險活動的人也許會受傷，同時，一些危險性的運動會成為暴力傳播的借口。
全文點評：普通版極限運動的創(chuàng)作所用詞匯皆來自高中3500詞匯。兩個版本，一是支持極限運動，二是反對極限運動。文無定法，只要論證有力，可以自圓其說，觀點無所謂對錯。想要證明的是即使高中生使用簡潔詞匯，有限句法，也可創(chuàng)作出主題明確，邏輯清晰，論證飽滿，句型變化的高分作文。
范文解析版本二：高大上版
首段：背景介紹
Such is a human nature to explore and experience the unknown. A trend is that numerous people are fond of embarking on challenging sports events, such as mountain biking, rock climbing and scuba diving, especially among those dynamic young adults. Those who pursue excitement and the sense of refreshment in the dull routine daily life claim that life without risk is no life at all.(65)
翻譯：探究和體驗未知的世界是人之本性, 當下, 很多人,尤其是精力充沛的年輕人, 喜歡從事充滿挑戰(zhàn)的競技體育項目, 例如山地自行車, 攀巖和海底潛水等。那些喜歡在枯燥的，日復一日的生活中追求刺激和新鮮的人聲稱, 人生沒有冒險就不能稱其為人生。
點評：首段自然開篇，沒有爭議焦點和寫作意圖，沒有模版痕跡，留下想象空間。
語料庫：
1.Such is a human nature to…… 做……是人之本性
2.embark on = undertake = take up v 從事……
3.dynamic = energetic adj精力充沛的
4.challenging adj 充滿挑戰(zhàn)性的
5.perilous = dangerous = risky adj 危險的
二段：我的口吻談及極限運動的好處：
Granted, a great many virtues could be gained via undertaking those risky or demanding sports activities. Primarily, the extreme adventures can be taken as is a sort of effective way to help players relieve their pressure and relax their mood， because the occupied modern life often deprive one's right of seeking relaxation. The popularity of bungee jumping accounts for risky sports' significant function in terms of reducing stress. Imaginably, one's working or study efficiency could be highly enhanced after doing his or her favorite sports events. Moreover, not only can the extreme adventures exert wholesome impacts, but also it could foster one's skills, chasten one's tenacity and forge one's frustration toleration. Some extreme adventures，such as rock climbing and surfing， requires high techniques or much perseverance. Ultimately, the extreme adventures could be developed into tempting tourism items, which could generate immense economic value.(143)
翻譯：的確，從事極限運動好處很多。 第一, 這是一種極佳的方式幫助運動者緩解壓力, 愉悅心情, 因為緊張的現(xiàn)代生活已經(jīng)剝奪了人們放松休閑的權(quán)利。蹦極運動的流行就解釋了運動在緩解壓力方面的積極作用?？梢韵胂? 運動之后,人們的工作學習效率都會提高。另外, 極限運動不僅僅有益健康, 還能培養(yǎng)人的技巧, 磨礪人的堅韌性以及鑄造人的挫折忍受力, 一些運動, 例如攀巖和沖浪, 就需要人有極高的技巧和毅力。 最后, 極限運動可以開發(fā)成熱門的旅游項目, 創(chuàng)造巨大的經(jīng)濟價值。
點評： 極限運動就是運動的好處 就是戶外活動的好處, 就是體育課的好處。第一點可以從健康緩解壓力的角度展開。第二點論及到精神成面，用三劍客短語才藝展示一下。第三個論據(jù)可以上升到旅游經(jīng)濟。
語料庫：
1.accounts for v解釋了……
2.in terms of adv 在……方面
3.deprive one's right of …… v剝奪某人……的權(quán)利
4.the extreme adventures n極限運動
5.exert wholesome impacts v有益健康
6.foster one's skills, chasten one's tenacity and forge one's frustration toleration v培養(yǎng)人的技巧，磨礪人的堅韌性以及鑄造人的挫折忍受力。
三段：談及極限運動的弊端：
Nonetheless, problems invariably ensue. One possible downside is that some perilous sports activities might become the roots of injuries and agonies. There exist high levels of injuries, which sometimes disable players and even ruin their whole lives. Another adverse aspect is that some intense extreme sports are merely an excuse for violence. To illustrate, boxing involves excessive violence and bloody contents so that it imposes adverse impact on adolescent TV viewers, namely, it might arouse their sadistic impulse.(78)
翻譯：然而, 問題隨之而來。第一， 危險性極高的運動可能會導致意外受傷和痛苦。這些意外有可能導致人的殘疾或者毀掉人的一生。第二， 一些劇烈的極端運動會成為暴力的借口。例如, 拳擊比賽含有太多的暴力和血腥, 對于年輕人有不良的影響, 例如誘發(fā)他們的施虐沖動。
點評：弊端寫成出兩點, 理性客觀. 模版?zhèn)€性化,路標詞匯清晰，行文有亮點.
語料庫：
1.problems invariably ensue 問題隨之發(fā)生
2.disable players v導致運動者殘疾
3.imposes adverse impact on …… v施加了不良影響
4.namely adv即是說
5.It might arouse their sadistic impulse 引起他們施虐沖動
總結(jié)：亮明觀點
Personally, I encourage the extreme adventures, for it is a symbol of freedom, so it is citizens' elementary right to opt for his or her favorite sports activities. Efforts should be made to ensure risky sports events are thrilling, amusing and profit-making, however, to prevent accident and injury is highly recommended. (52)
翻譯：個人而言, 我十分鼓勵極限運動，這是自由的象征，這是公民的基本權(quán)利選擇自己喜歡的運動。我們應該努力保證運動的刺激，有趣和盈利，但是, 采取措施去預防受傷和意外又是高度推薦的。
點評：尾段亮明立場，針對弊端再提出解決策略，觀點無懈可擊。
語料庫：
1.efforts should be made to …… 我們應該努力做……
2.are thrilling, amusing and profit-making adj 刺激的，有趣的和盈利的。
3.opt for his or her favorite sports activities v選擇喜歡的運動
全文點評： 文無定法，本文自然開篇，摒棄常規(guī)寫法，主題留有懸念。主體段落自然論證極限運動的利弊，尾段亮明立場，針對弊端再提出解決策略，觀點無懈可擊。全文約280字，剛好在40分鐘可以完成。自我評分這篇文章會7.5分以上。
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