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    針對這個問題。筆者提出讀寫教程的學(xué)習(xí)方法。并且,在新東方已經(jīng)試點。學(xué)生是一些高中考不上大學(xué)的所謂“留學(xué)垃圾”(其實我本人反對這種說法)。先看教學(xué)之前,考生的作文。我隨機(jī)從2000份作文中抽取兩篇,一字不差地原文轉(zhuǎn)載學(xué)生的習(xí)作:
    學(xué)生作文之一 30分鐘
    someone said that teachers not no longer useful, nevertheless I don’t agree it.
    Now, computers are widely in all kinds of fields. And it is more and more important. But some of special fields computers can’t do any thing. For example, whe the child was young. They come to school. They can’t use any machine before. They need a warm hand from mother techer more than cold computer key. So I don’t agree it.
    這是一名中國考生在30分鐘內(nèi)寫的“文章”—— 其實,根本不是文章。錯誤百出,時態(tài)混亂,動詞錯誤,邏輯關(guān)系不明等等錯誤。
    學(xué)生作文之二 30分鐘
    Compared to the automobile or train, the bicycle nowadays tends to be more common as a transport. Some people are think that the bicycle is the best way to tour. I am of the opinion that riding bicycle has advantage and disadvantages.
    To begin with, bicycle is the cheapest transport. In china, people just need spend RMB 400 to buy a high quality bicycle. The car, however, at least is spent RMB 40000. To many Chinese people, they prefer to buy a bicycle because they have no enough money to buy a car. Next, sometimes riding bicycle is more convenient than driving a car. For example, I have to spend 1 hour to drive car cover 10 miles during the rush hour from my home to my office in Beijing. At same distance, I only need 20 minutes by riding bicycle. Finally, I think the bicycle do not make heavy pollution to our environment.
    這些文字是在中國考生中非常有代表性的。其他教師和考生可以閱讀類似的作文,然后進(jìn)行批改訓(xùn)練。提高自己的寫作教學(xué)和寫作能力。
    根據(jù)這些情況,我在NATIONAL GEOGRAPHY 雜志上選取了部分含有考生需要的句型,首先進(jìn)行分析,然后讓學(xué)生模仿??纯聪旅孢x取的一段文字:
    The wolves play an integral part in the ecosystem in the archipelago, and their diet can offer scientists important clues about the dynamics between predator and prey.
    Investigating the feces of the elusive wolves, Darimont found that their diets consist to a large extent of black-tailed deer. But he also found that their diets vary greatly depending on location. On the outer islands, for example, wolves are far less likely to have a deer for lunch than on the inner islands.
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    These findings suggest that wolves can deplete resources in isolated areas, making the link between the predators and their prey more delicate there.
    The information is important for understanding not only island ecosystems, but also for conservation efforts. If scientists can understand how species behave on isolated islands, they may be able to figure out how the species will behave in other places that are becoming more fragmented.
    選自:Canada's Rain Forest Wolves a Link to Past
    Stefan Lovgren October 1, 2004
    從這段文字中,我首先教學(xué)生學(xué)習(xí):
    ecosystem
    biota
    biodiversity
    play an integral part in
    play a key role in
    offer somebody something
    dynamics between …and…
    predators and prey
    然后根據(jù)第二個段落,講解現(xiàn)在分詞短語結(jié)構(gòu),
    consist of consist to a large extent of
    depend on depend to a large extent on
    比較結(jié)構(gòu)的對稱性和倒裝性
    be likely to do something
    not only…but also…
    然后指導(dǎo)學(xué)生學(xué)習(xí)寫作:分析下面一片學(xué)生作文:
    Living in the big cities, people are more likely to forget the key roles that animals play in an ecosystem. But almost all animals can do good, directly or indirectly, to our life. For example, fish and shrimp offer not only foods but also scientific research materials. Birds in various colors and shapes offer scientists new clues to understand the dynamic between human and other animals. From this point of view, animals must be well protected.
    這是,授課結(jié)束后,一個學(xué)生的寫作。對比前后兩篇作文,明顯看到進(jìn)步。
    如果我只是單純地講解單詞,學(xué)生不可那寫出這樣的文章。但是,我給學(xué)生講解的完整的句子和句子之間的邏輯關(guān)系。就直接啟發(fā)學(xué)生的思維,導(dǎo)致分?jǐn)?shù)的提高。 從這個教學(xué)實例可以推出,教學(xué)生提高句子量,應(yīng)該實寫作突破的方法之一。(完)
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