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Task 2: Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic.
Every country needs to remember its past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Recently, there seem to be a hot-debated issue that we should remember our past of our country. Whether every country needs to remember previous history or not, as far as I am concerned, I find myself on the opinion that we must remember our past forever concerning the following aspects.
Fist of all, I take the attitude that our history is very significant. （這個主題句有點問題，歷史很重要，這個太沒有觀點了）We own a long history country, which had been built about five thousands years and includes fifty-six ethnics, among which Han Ethnic is the biggest. Our country is formed by these great persons whose spirit make（makes） us admire. When we mention these great leaders, we can’t help thinking of Chairmen Mao who had experienced quiet a few wars and created a lot of wealth.
最好把毛澤東的全名寫上，不要只用mao
Moreover, we should remember our culture（也是主題句的問題，為什么要記住呢？按照你后面論述的，應該把主題句改為：記住歷史可以指導我們以后的學習工作或生活）. Our motherland had witnessed 5000 years. There is a very complex culture, which includes Kongzi and Laozi.（孔子和老子的說法不對，孔子叫做confucius，老子lao-tzu） When we give a birth, we need to learn them from our mother. And then we go to school, the teachers also teach us these knowledge which is ethic. lastly, we usually use moral of our culture to do business.
Admittedly, sometimes we needn’t remember our past, which covers a lot of pains like wars and poor, and we should forget. However, we must learn what happened in these war and we should communicate well with these countries without any hatred. According to previous poor, the whole country should study hard modern techniques and work hard for country.這段的讓步有問題，你說應該忘記戰(zhàn)爭貧窮，這都是不和邏輯的說法，應該說歷史中確實有一些糟粕，我們應該正確對待，加以區(qū)分。
In a nutshell, as a part of country, we should remember our previous history without discrimination and hatred. In terms of technology and economic, there is a great space to improve, comparing to other countries. We should remember our past.
Band 5.5
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Task 2: Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic.
Every country needs to remember its past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Recently, there seem to be a hot-debated issue that we should remember our past of our country. Whether every country needs to remember previous history or not, as far as I am concerned, I find myself on the opinion that we must remember our past forever concerning the following aspects.
Fist of all, I take the attitude that our history is very significant. （這個主題句有點問題，歷史很重要，這個太沒有觀點了）We own a long history country, which had been built about five thousands years and includes fifty-six ethnics, among which Han Ethnic is the biggest. Our country is formed by these great persons whose spirit make（makes） us admire. When we mention these great leaders, we can’t help thinking of Chairmen Mao who had experienced quiet a few wars and created a lot of wealth.
最好把毛澤東的全名寫上，不要只用mao
Moreover, we should remember our culture（也是主題句的問題，為什么要記住呢？按照你后面論述的，應該把主題句改為：記住歷史可以指導我們以后的學習工作或生活）. Our motherland had witnessed 5000 years. There is a very complex culture, which includes Kongzi and Laozi.（孔子和老子的說法不對，孔子叫做confucius，老子lao-tzu） When we give a birth, we need to learn them from our mother. And then we go to school, the teachers also teach us these knowledge which is ethic. lastly, we usually use moral of our culture to do business.
Admittedly, sometimes we needn’t remember our past, which covers a lot of pains like wars and poor, and we should forget. However, we must learn what happened in these war and we should communicate well with these countries without any hatred. According to previous poor, the whole country should study hard modern techniques and work hard for country.這段的讓步有問題，你說應該忘記戰(zhàn)爭貧窮，這都是不和邏輯的說法，應該說歷史中確實有一些糟粕，我們應該正確對待，加以區(qū)分。
In a nutshell, as a part of country, we should remember our previous history without discrimination and hatred. In terms of technology and economic, there is a great space to improve, comparing to other countries. We should remember our past.
Band 5.5
雅思作文要想更進一步,請?zhí)焯煸L問我們.感謝閱讀《Every country needs to remember its pa》一文.