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好的作文不是一次性寫出來的,而是改出來的,好的口語也不是一次性說出來的,而是無數(shù)次修改遣詞造句的結果,在我讀哈佛法學院那本書的時候,發(fā)現(xiàn)即使最牛的金牌律師,在臨上庭的時候都會把盤問的每一個字寫在紙上,以求萬無一失,作為第二語言學習者的我們,在英文學習的時候,沒有任何理由不這么去做。雅思班的同學發(fā)來一些句子,讓我?guī)退麄冃薷?,而我給他們的建議都是自己先修改三次,有明顯進步后,有解決不了的問題我再來幫助他們。以下是幾個我覺得比較典型的句子,我們來分析一下。
原句:With all the reasons, the mind to be with you is always existing from the first moment when opening my eyes to the last second when clasing them, and is planted in my heart deeptly just like a luxuriant tree.
點評:With all the reasons, the mind to be with you is always existing(時態(tài)有一點問題) from 要加上the first moment when opening(主語是mind不是I,所以這里不能用ing,否則就是mind自己張開眼睛的意思) my eyes to the last second when clasing(單詞拼寫錯誤) them, and is planted (是不是想說植根)in my heart deeply, just like a luxuriant tree.
修改參考:With all the reasons that can be found in this universe, the faith to be with has been deeply rooted in my mind, heart and soul from the first moment when I open my eyes to the last second when I close them.
好的作文不是一次性寫出來的,而是改出來的,好的口語也不是一次性說出來的,而是無數(shù)次修改遣詞造句的結果,在我讀哈佛法學院那本書的時候,發(fā)現(xiàn)即使最牛的金牌律師,在臨上庭的時候都會把盤問的每一個字寫在紙上,以求萬無一失,作為第二語言學習者的我們,在英文學習的時候,沒有任何理由不這么去做。雅思班的同學發(fā)來一些句子,讓我?guī)退麄冃薷?,而我給他們的建議都是自己先修改三次,有明顯進步后,有解決不了的問題我再來幫助他們。以下是幾個我覺得比較典型的句子,我們來分析一下。
原句:With all the reasons, the mind to be with you is always existing from the first moment when opening my eyes to the last second when clasing them, and is planted in my heart deeptly just like a luxuriant tree.
點評:With all the reasons, the mind to be with you is always existing(時態(tài)有一點問題) from 要加上the first moment when opening(主語是mind不是I,所以這里不能用ing,否則就是mind自己張開眼睛的意思) my eyes to the last second when clasing(單詞拼寫錯誤) them, and is planted (是不是想說植根)in my heart deeply, just like a luxuriant tree.
修改參考:With all the reasons that can be found in this universe, the faith to be with has been deeply rooted in my mind, heart and soul from the first moment when I open my eyes to the last second when I close them.
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好的作文不是一次性寫出來的,而是改出來的,好的口語也不是一次性說出來的,而是無數(shù)次修改遣詞造句的結果,在我讀哈佛法學院那本書的時候,發(fā)現(xiàn)即使最牛的金牌律師,在臨上庭的時候都會把盤問的每一個字寫在紙上,以求萬無一失,作為第二語言學習者的我們,在英文學習的時候,沒有任何理由不這么去做。雅思班的同學發(fā)來一些句子,讓我?guī)退麄冃薷?,而我給他們的建議都是自己先修改三次,有明顯進步后,有解決不了的問題我再來幫助他們。以下是幾個我覺得比較典型的句子,我們來分析一下。
原句:With all the reasons, the mind to be with you is always existing from the first moment when opening my eyes to the last second when clasing them, and is planted in my heart deeptly just like a luxuriant tree.
點評:With all the reasons, the mind to be with you is always existing(時態(tài)有一點問題) from 要加上the first moment when opening(主語是mind不是I,所以這里不能用ing,否則就是mind自己張開眼睛的意思) my eyes to the last second when clasing(單詞拼寫錯誤) them, and is planted (是不是想說植根)in my heart deeply, just like a luxuriant tree.
修改參考:With all the reasons that can be found in this universe, the faith to be with has been deeply rooted in my mind, heart and soul from the first moment when I open my eyes to the last second when I close them.
好的作文不是一次性寫出來的,而是改出來的,好的口語也不是一次性說出來的,而是無數(shù)次修改遣詞造句的結果,在我讀哈佛法學院那本書的時候,發(fā)現(xiàn)即使最牛的金牌律師,在臨上庭的時候都會把盤問的每一個字寫在紙上,以求萬無一失,作為第二語言學習者的我們,在英文學習的時候,沒有任何理由不這么去做。雅思班的同學發(fā)來一些句子,讓我?guī)退麄冃薷?,而我給他們的建議都是自己先修改三次,有明顯進步后,有解決不了的問題我再來幫助他們。以下是幾個我覺得比較典型的句子,我們來分析一下。
原句:With all the reasons, the mind to be with you is always existing from the first moment when opening my eyes to the last second when clasing them, and is planted in my heart deeptly just like a luxuriant tree.
點評:With all the reasons, the mind to be with you is always existing(時態(tài)有一點問題) from 要加上the first moment when opening(主語是mind不是I,所以這里不能用ing,否則就是mind自己張開眼睛的意思) my eyes to the last second when clasing(單詞拼寫錯誤) them, and is planted (是不是想說植根)in my heart deeply, just like a luxuriant tree.
修改參考:With all the reasons that can be found in this universe, the faith to be with has been deeply rooted in my mind, heart and soul from the first moment when I open my eyes to the last second when I close them.
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