雅思寫(xiě)作詞匯2012:好作文是改出來(lái)的

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    好的作文不是一次性寫(xiě)出來(lái)的,而是改出來(lái)的,好的口語(yǔ)也不是一次性說(shuō)出來(lái)的,而是無(wú)數(shù)次修改遣詞造句的結(jié)果,在我讀哈佛法學(xué)院那本書(shū)的時(shí)候,發(fā)現(xiàn)即使最牛的金牌律師,在臨上庭的時(shí)候都會(huì)把盤(pán)問(wèn)的每一個(gè)字寫(xiě)在紙上,以求萬(wàn)無(wú)一失,作為第二語(yǔ)言學(xué)習(xí)者的我們,在英文學(xué)習(xí)的時(shí)候,沒(méi)有任何理由不這么去做。雅思班的同學(xué)發(fā)來(lái)一些句子,讓我?guī)退麄冃薷?,而我給他們的建議都是自己先修改三次,有明顯進(jìn)步后,有解決不了的問(wèn)題我再來(lái)幫助他們。以下是幾個(gè)我覺(jué)得比較典型的句子,我們來(lái)分析一下。
    原句:With all the reasons, the mind to be with you is always existing from the first moment when opening my eyes to the last second when clasing them, and is planted in my heart deeptly just like a luxuriant tree.
    點(diǎn)評(píng):With all the reasons, the mind to be with you is always existing(時(shí)態(tài)有一點(diǎn)問(wèn)題) from 要加上the first moment when opening(主語(yǔ)是mind不是I,所以這里不能用ing,否則就是mind自己張開(kāi)眼睛的意思) my eyes to the last second when clasing(單詞拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤) them, and is planted (是不是想說(shuō)植根)in my heart deeply, just like a luxuriant tree.
    修改參考:With all the reasons that can be found in this universe, the faith to be with has been deeply rooted in my mind, heart and soul from the first moment when I open my eyes to the last second when I close them.
    好的作文不是一次性寫(xiě)出來(lái)的,而是改出來(lái)的,好的口語(yǔ)也不是一次性說(shuō)出來(lái)的,而是無(wú)數(shù)次修改遣詞造句的結(jié)果,在我讀哈佛法學(xué)院那本書(shū)的時(shí)候,發(fā)現(xiàn)即使最牛的金牌律師,在臨上庭的時(shí)候都會(huì)把盤(pán)問(wèn)的每一個(gè)字寫(xiě)在紙上,以求萬(wàn)無(wú)一失,作為第二語(yǔ)言學(xué)習(xí)者的我們,在英文學(xué)習(xí)的時(shí)候,沒(méi)有任何理由不這么去做。雅思班的同學(xué)發(fā)來(lái)一些句子,讓我?guī)退麄冃薷?,而我給他們的建議都是自己先修改三次,有明顯進(jìn)步后,有解決不了的問(wèn)題我再來(lái)幫助他們。以下是幾個(gè)我覺(jué)得比較典型的句子,我們來(lái)分析一下。
    原句:With all the reasons, the mind to be with you is always existing from the first moment when opening my eyes to the last second when clasing them, and is planted in my heart deeptly just like a luxuriant tree.
    點(diǎn)評(píng):With all the reasons, the mind to be with you is always existing(時(shí)態(tài)有一點(diǎn)問(wèn)題) from 要加上the first moment when opening(主語(yǔ)是mind不是I,所以這里不能用ing,否則就是mind自己張開(kāi)眼睛的意思) my eyes to the last second when clasing(單詞拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤) them, and is planted (是不是想說(shuō)植根)in my heart deeply, just like a luxuriant tree.
    修改參考:With all the reasons that can be found in this universe, the faith to be with has been deeply rooted in my mind, heart and soul from the first moment when I open my eyes to the last second when I close them.
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