澳大利亞留學(xué)動(dòng)機(jī)信寫作要注意哪些問題

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    去澳洲讀書,大家要確保自己的動(dòng)機(jī)信寫作內(nèi)容符合要求,并且留學(xué)的動(dòng)機(jī)需要合理。跟著出國(guó)留學(xué)網(wǎng)一起看看澳大利亞留學(xué)動(dòng)機(jī)信寫作要注意哪些問題?
    書寫內(nèi)容
    1.申請(qǐng)人原住國(guó)的條件;
    2.申請(qǐng)人未來(lái)在澳洲的條件;
    3.申請(qǐng)人的移民歷史;
    4.課程對(duì)于申請(qǐng)人未來(lái)的價(jià)值;
    5.其他有關(guān)可能導(dǎo)致申請(qǐng)人短期在澳洲停留的因素。
    動(dòng)機(jī)合理
    1.動(dòng)機(jī)信要樸實(shí)、整潔,使對(duì)方樂于閱讀
    所寫句子要簡(jiǎn)潔明了,根據(jù)內(nèi)容進(jìn)行分段,不需要啰嗦很多。本文中,寫自己成長(zhǎng)于哪里哪里一句話帶過已經(jīng)足夠了,再多寫一些就是啰嗦。寫文書需要謹(jǐn)記每一句都是為整體服務(wù),如果不是很需要,就說(shuō)明句子還能繼續(xù)優(yōu)化??梢哉?qǐng)別人多次閱讀所完成的文書,一步步剔除不恰當(dāng)?shù)谋磉_(dá)。
    2.避免幼稚,委婉表達(dá)
    留學(xué)生的文書很經(jīng)常犯下幼稚的錯(cuò)誤,寫文書時(shí)候必須注意避免幼稚,避免太過直接,當(dāng)然也不宜使用。
    3.不宜過長(zhǎng),內(nèi)容精悍為佳
    一份文書雖然需要包含多項(xiàng)內(nèi)容,但長(zhǎng)度仍需注意,不要太長(zhǎng),不要發(fā)散地去講自己本身有多優(yōu)秀有哪些優(yōu)勢(shì),這些是需要學(xué)校方面做出判斷的,不要對(duì)自身?xiàng)l件做夸大。
    模板介紹
    這樣說(shuō)起來(lái)有點(diǎn)抽象,這里我嘗試通過我的經(jīng)歷來(lái)說(shuō)明這個(gè)問題/方法。
    首先,我還是要先提示一下。動(dòng)機(jī)信的最初幾行應(yīng)該用來(lái)說(shuō)明你寫這封信的目的(申請(qǐng)博士職位與獎(jiǎng)學(xué)金),以及你目前的狀態(tài)(正在讀研或者工作)。別一開始就是I was born in... ,那樣會(huì)讓老外相當(dāng)費(fèi)解的!
    交代完背景信息后,進(jìn)入主題。
    我是先寫本科階段的 My undergraduate education was trained in ...這里,我的問題比較嚴(yán)重,那就是成績(jī)不好,當(dāng)時(shí)比較貪玩,上課的時(shí)間總是與我踢球或者打游戲的時(shí)間沖突。我自己算了一下,平均分也就70+分,還掛過幾科。這里,我沒有選擇回避這一點(diǎn),相反,我要強(qiáng)調(diào)它!以證明我是一個(gè)從逆境中走出來(lái)的人,一個(gè)浪子回頭金不換的典范!
    當(dāng)然,描述也是需要技巧的,我是這么說(shuō)的:But truth be told, in the undergraduate period I was not an outstanding student subjected to the judgment based on academic records. At that time I thought textbooks were more or less boring and professors’ courses were far away from reality. Further more, then I noticed little that I will be involved in academic research in one day.
    人都有過年少輕狂的日子吧,可能正在讀你信的教授也有過!這段描述同時(shí)給我的后文買下
    來(lái)伏筆,為什么有一天我會(huì)選擇搞學(xué)術(shù)呢,而且肯定不是一時(shí)沖動(dòng)的舉動(dòng)。
    接著看:However, a turning point occurred when I participated in a research project ×××. It’s a××× project on innovative mechanical design, which was truly challenging to me with nearly zero engineering experience. But I found soon that it’s an amazing project for solving practical problems for company, with valuable scientific issues involved. Then I put my heart in the work×××××. This experience excited me a great curiosity in research as I tasted the feelings of discovering something new and solving real problems in engineering. That’s just stirring.
    這樣子,你就完成了一個(gè)不小的逆轉(zhuǎn)。這就好比說(shuō)是談戀愛,年輕的時(shí)候我們總想追求一個(gè)我們真正很愛很愛的人,但追尋了很多年,卻仍就沒有找到。直到有一天,你突然頓悟:原來(lái)愛不是平白無(wú)故產(chǎn)生的,只有兩個(gè)人在一起經(jīng)歷了很多,尤其是一起吃了很多苦以后,才會(huì)最終真的相愛,并廝守一生。
    有點(diǎn)扯遠(yuǎn)了,我的意思是你光憑嘴說(shuō)你喜歡科研,喜歡的不得了,就是喜歡,好使嗎?教授相信嗎?起碼我看了之后會(huì)感覺很假,所以你得講故事,越生動(dòng)越好,但不要瞎杜撰,像寫小說(shuō)一樣,那樣就適得其反了。
    下面講研究生階段。因?yàn)楹芏嘈畔?,如課題/論文等都在CV中有過介紹,動(dòng)機(jī)信這里就不要再重復(fù)了,可以一言以蔽之: Most of my research activities at ××× are presented in my CV for your information. In a word, I’ve been enjoyed the three years at ×××, especially ×××
    然后,我寫了一些我工作的體會(huì),希望這段描述對(duì)大家也有借鑒意義。 this ongoing working experience is very valuable for me, not only technically. In fact it teaches me something that I hadn’t learnt from school, e.g. EQ is much more important than IQ.
    下面的內(nèi)容往往被很多申請(qǐng)者所忽視,那就是你應(yīng)該談?wù)勀銓?duì)你申請(qǐng)的學(xué)校/實(shí)驗(yàn)室,尤其是導(dǎo)師的了解情況,為什么這個(gè)研究課題對(duì)你有吸引力,你又為什么是一個(gè)合適的人選!
    這里,我想毫無(wú)保留向大家展示一下我的看家本領(lǐng),這可是不輕易示人的東西啊。其實(shí)也就是我在Presentation中的陳述的幾點(diǎn),這幾點(diǎn)得到兩位指導(dǎo)教授很好的評(píng)價(jià):Clear, strongly impressed.
    Why I apply for this thesis
    Firstly, I am really interested in this research proposal, which, expected to be carried out on the microscopic scale, is very appealing to me.
    Secondly, the thesis’s supervisors are well-known specialists in this research field, whose guidance and advice will be absolutely helpful for my academic career.
    Lastly, full-field measurement technology is still considered as a relative emerging research direction, but active in France, where I think is the best place to devote my energy to this promising research area.
    Why I am a worthy candidate
    Having three years’ research experience on full-filed measurements, particularly in terms of experiment, which is crucial to this thesis research.
    Skilled in numerical analysis and data processing by means of the software MatLab, which is eagerly expected in this thesis research.
    With sufficient knowledge of metal properties and good comprehension of nonlinear mechanics behaviors in solid, which is a favorable condition for this thesis research.
    最后,表一表決心, I am sure that, with the benefit of your advice, I can acquire broader perspectives and more profound insights.......
    動(dòng)機(jī)信被認(rèn)為是很正式的申請(qǐng)文件,里面不要出現(xiàn) I'd, don't 這樣的省略用法,也盡量避免有語(yǔ)法與表達(dá)問題。在提交正式文件的時(shí)候,教授給了我很多建議,還幫我進(jìn)行了一些修改。