以下《2014考研英語作文押題追星范文》由出國留學網(wǎng)考研英語作文頻道為您精心提供，歡迎大家瀏覽參考。
寫作原文
As is subtly portrayed in the drawing, the picture on the left illustrates a young boy wrote(改為writing或者with) a famous football player'(加s,即player’s) name,(去掉)——Beckham ,(去掉) on his face, (句子較復雜，可改為a young boy has the word “Beckham ”,the name of a famous football player, written on his face) and the other picture on the right illustrates a young man who wants to have a hair style of Beckham and spends on 300RMB(改為which needs 300RMB). These pictures illustrate(加 that)the worship of star(改為the stars，或把整體改為idol-worshipping) is popular in the modern society.There are some factors contribute(改為contributing) to this phenomenon. The first factor(加is) that the ideology of young individuals in modern society is not independence(改為independent, independence是名詞) . They do not know that(去掉) what is worth to hold (改為what to hold)and what is(去掉) they really want or need. The second factor(加is) that the atmosphere of the modern society is not verybenefit(改為beneficial，benefit是動詞) to the development of young folks. With the dissemination of TVs, magazines,(去掉) and so forth, the environment of worship of star(改為idol-worshipping) is increasing popularity(改為becoming increasingly popular). So it can influence young person(加s) always and everywhere.In my point of view, the preference of individual, there is no one right or wrong choice(句式混亂，改為there’s no right or wrong regards to individuals’ preference). Because various folks take different attitudes toward(改為towards) the phenomenon of worship, many may be (去掉)like while other(改為others) may not. But I deem, as college students, we should put our vigour on the (去掉)learning rather than pursuing star(改為stars).
總體點評
文章存在很多語法上的問題，尤其是比較細致的問題，還有標點符號運用有誤，作者在完成習作后應(yīng)認真檢查，避免不必要的錯誤。此外，詞匯量少，比如在第一段一直重復illustrate這個單詞，平時可以多積累一些詞匯，在運用的時候注意變換。句型也相對較為單一，多總結(jié)模仿經(jīng)典句型，提高自己的寫作水平，為自己的習作增彩。作者可以從大量熟讀經(jīng)典范文入手，積累知識，自己勤于練習。加油吧，祝你考研成功!
考研英語作文頻道推薦鏈接：
2014考研英語作文熱門話題預測匯總
2014考研英語作文萬能模板匯總
2014考研英語作文范文匯總
| 考研英語大綱 | 考研英語詞匯 | 英語作文萬能句子 | 考研英語真題 | 考研英語作文 | 考研復試英語 |